[学生原文]苦中有乐(标题俗套,缺少新意。)我告别昔日的轻松与幼稚,回顾往事,心中不免涌出无奈与失落……(开头平淡,情感表达不充分,没有起到奠定全文感情基调、引起下文的作用。)走进初三的教室,充满了紧迫感,让我不得不埋头读书,和那些“X、Y、Z”打成一片,和那些“知乎者也? [Student’s text] There is happiness (composition and lack of new ideas.) I say goodbye to the old days of being relaxed and naive. Looking back on the past, I feel helpless and lost... (The beginning was dull and the emotional expression was not enough to lay the full text.) Feelings of tone, causing the following effects.) Entering the third grade classroom, filled with a sense of urgency, so I had to immerse myself in reading, and those who “X, Y, Z” into a piece, and those who “who knew what?”