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清泉源出深山,穿山越涧,汇入深潭,自以为到达, 却成为一潭空对夜月的死水。[这一节文字虽好, 但与题目关系不大,可删去] 水是灵动之物,奔腾是它的生命,一旦停止,便失去生命。水犹如此,更何况人呢?[引水及人,引出下文] 漫长的人生旅程,偶尔小憩是可以的,但如果停泊要用岁月来度量,那么在航行中所拥有的那一点灵动便一点一点地消磨,船上的油漆会在雨水冲洗中斑驳, 船舷会在整日暴晒中开裂,船缆松弛了,船帆吹破了, 等到百舟竞发之日,再想起航,也许只能空坐破舟,对饮残月,悲叹“沉舟侧畔千帆过”了。[“消磨”“斑驳”“开裂”“松弛”“吹破”,这些词形象地写出了不“出发”之弊]遥想当年,行舟人能不追忆往日“到达”时的轻快? 能不悔恨迟迟不“出发”的后果?[考虑上下文的连贯, “遥想当年”宜改为“此时回想当初”] 人生并非永是“出发”,也并非永无“到达”。迢迢人
Qingquan originated from the deep mountains, crossed the mountains, and entered the deep pool. From the thought of arriving, it became a stagnant water of night and moon. [This text is good, but it has nothing to do with the subject, but it can be deleted] Water is a smart thing. Pentium is its life. Once it stops, it loses its life. The water is still like this, let alone people? [Diverting water and people, citing the following] The long journey of life, and occasionally small pipa is possible, but if the berthing is to be measured in years, then there is a little more flexibility in the voyage. Little by little, the paint on the boat will be mottled in the rain, the ship’s side will be cracked during the whole day’s exposure, the ship’s cable will be slack, the sails will be blown, and when the boat races, think again of sailing, maybe only Empty boat ride, on the moon, sigh, “thinking side of the boat sinking.” [“Desire”, “Mottled”, “Cracking”, “Relaxation”, “Breaking”, these words vividly illustrate the disadvantage of not “starting”. Looking back then, can the boater not recall the lightness of his past “arrival”? Do not regret the consequences of delaying “starting”? [Consider the coherence of the context, “Think back then” should be changed to “Recall this time”] Life is not always “starting”, nor is it not “arrival”. Deaf people