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陈传光 男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师，从事教育工作15年;江苏省教育学会会员、连云港市优秀教育園丁，获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖、班主任基本功大赛市一等奖;有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表;指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了不错的成绩，多人获得省级奖和地市级奖。
I’ll be a senior high school student after this summer vacation， so my parents and I decided making① this summer vacation a special and memorable one for me.
Because I wanted to do something new， meaningful and challenging， so② I signed up for a summer camp in Beijing. It was my the③ first time to Beijing， but sight-seeing was not the end. In the camp， I studied how to survive in the wild. After the training， I have learned to make a tent， to distinguish edible mushrooms from poisonous ones and so on.
I think this summer vacation is the most meaningful one I’ve ever had.
江苏省连云港市罗阳中学九（1）班 陈潇潇
1. 优点：
本文作者介绍了自己度过的一个暑假，详细描述了在暑假里所做的事情和收获。整篇文章文字流畅、用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①making改为to make。decide to do sth.意为“决定做某事”。
②so去掉。Because和so不能同时出现在一句话中。
③the去掉。序数词前如果有形容词性物主代词修饰，要省略定冠词the。
3. 评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。
I’ll be a senior high school student after this summer vacation， so my parents and I decided making① this summer vacation a special and memorable one for me.
Because I wanted to do something new， meaningful and challenging， so② I signed up for a summer camp in Beijing. It was my the③ first time to Beijing， but sight-seeing was not the end. In the camp， I studied how to survive in the wild. After the training， I have learned to make a tent， to distinguish edible mushrooms from poisonous ones and so on.
I think this summer vacation is the most meaningful one I’ve ever had.
江苏省连云港市罗阳中学九（1）班 陈潇潇
1. 优点：
本文作者介绍了自己度过的一个暑假，详细描述了在暑假里所做的事情和收获。整篇文章文字流畅、用词得当，是一篇不错的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①making改为to make。decide to do sth.意为“决定做某事”。
②so去掉。Because和so不能同时出现在一句话中。
③the去掉。序数词前如果有形容词性物主代词修饰，要省略定冠词the。
3. 评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得23分。