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这一组升格作文的启示是：打腹稿时,思维要发散——发散后要聚合——聚合后再聚合——再聚合后再发散；而后才能一挥而就。“升格前”作文,作者思维还处在发散阶段——“要写颦儿”,第一自然段中有一“真”字,便随即又来一“美”字——什么都想写,自然就不会出好文章。“升格后”作文,作者思维开始聚合——舍弃了“升格前”作文中的“美”字,只留下“真”字；但是作者在“真”字上,思维活动仅仅停留在发散阶段,用排比段(深入不下去时采用的办法)罗列“真”的方方面面及其事例,作者思维品质中的深刻性还未发挥出来,自然就只能写出“一般化”的文章。“再升格”作文,作者思维实现了再度聚合,只从“情”的角度写“真”,所以在列举了“情真”的事例后,深入分析其“真情”的共同思想基础——“不说‘混帐话’……超越名利”——不仅再现了作者思维品质的深刻性,也在思维再发散中凸显了思维品质的现实针对性。但是,作者对颦儿“你从此可都改了罢”一语的分析,未能表现思维品质的辩证性,应将“如果说宝钗给宝玉送来的是药,是治愈身体创伤的药；那么黛玉送来的则是治愈心灵创伤的药,是真心、真情”,修改为“这是为着实现“质本洁来还洁去”的理想,劝慰宝玉暂作妥协,决不是向“混帐事”投降。“再升格”后的好文章中还能挑出毛病来,可见“升格”无止境。
The enlightenment of this group of promotion essays is: When the abdomen is drafted, the mind must be divergent - converge after divergence - polymerize and then converge - re-aggregate and then diverge; Before the “upgrade” essay, the author’s thinking is still in the divergence stage - “To write chanting children”. In the first paragraph of nature, there is a “true” word, and then there is another “beauty” word - everything wants to write, naturally There will be no good articles. After the “After Upgrade” essay, the author’s thinking began to converge—abandoning the word “beauty” in the pre-upgrade essay, leaving only the word “true”; but the author’s thinking activity in the word “true” only remained in the divergence phase. With the use of the row-by-row method (the method used in the in-depth process) to list all aspects of “true” and its examples, the profound nature of the author’s thinking quality has not yet been exerted, and naturally only “generalized” articles can be written. After “re-raising” composition, the author’s thinking has reunited and wrote “truth” only from the perspective of “emotion”. Therefore, after enumerating examples of “truthfulness”, the author analyzed the common ideological foundation of “truth” - “ Don’t say ’daddy words’...beyond fame and fortune’ – not only reproduces the profound nature of the author’s thinking quality, but also highlights the realistic pertinence of thinking quality in the rethinking of thinking. However, the author’s analysis of the phrase “You have changed all of your life” in the nephew failed to show the dialectical quality of thinking. “If Bao Dai was sent to Baoyu as a medicine, it was a medicine to heal physical trauma. Then, what is sent by Saitama is the medicine for healing the wounds of the soul. It is a sincere and true feeling.” It was revised to “this is an ideal for realizing the quality and cleanliness.” To persuade Baoyu to make compromises for the time being, it is by no means “The miscellaneous account” surrendered, and the “good” article after “re-upgrading” could pick out faults. It can be seen that “upgrade” is endless.