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平时在家里,妈妈总是不让我干活,可我都12岁啦!于是,我写了一篇《渴望》,表达我渴望“长大”的心愿。这篇文章中涉及一些事例,我特意把这些事例写得很具体、很细致,自己还很得意呢。后来,我把这篇文章拿给老师看,老师却说文章的中心不突出。我当时还傻乎乎地愣着,老师问我:“你在这篇文章中想要表达的是什么?”我说:“我渴望多帮妈妈干些家务,渴望‘长大’。”老师又说:“你看,你把你妈妈不让你干活的事例写得这么具体,又把你
Usually at home, my mom always does not let me work, but I am 12 years old! So I wrote a “desire” to express my desire to “grow up” wish. There are some examples in this article. I deliberately wrote these examples in a very specific and meticulous manner and I am very proud of them. Later, I gave this article to the teacher to see, but the teacher said the center of the article is not prominent. I was stupidly stupidly silly, the teacher asked me: “What do you want to express in this article?” I said: “I am eager to do more housework for my mother, eager to 'grow up.'” The teacher said : “Look, you write so specific to your mother that you are not going to work, and take you again.”