以点带面,彰显爱心。以“阿姨”为重点,带出“白发老爷爷”和“扎着羊角辫的小女孩”——全社会各个年龄段的人都主动关爱他人。“受伤”的“我”提醒对方“阿姨,你的胳膊流血了”——忘记自己。此文还需要升格;首段和末段是“套子”——大路笔墨,应该删除;“关爱”不应只停留在“问候”上,应补充超常举动。 Bring love with your face. Focusing on “Auntie”, he brought out the “grandfather with white hair” and the “girl with a horned horned owl”—people of all ages in society take active care of others. The “injured” “I” reminds the other party that “Aunty, your arm is bleeding” - forgetting yourself. This article also needs to be upgraded; the first paragraph and the last paragraph are “covers”—the roads should be written and inked and should be deleted; “caring” should not only stop at the “greeting” but should be complemented by extraordinary actions.