论文部分内容阅读
●写作话题:商品与包装(products and packaging)
●写作例题
请根据以下的任务说明和写作要求,写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
[阅读材料]
I am not surprised that 75% of British consumers(消费者) feel products have too much packaging. It’s important to consider ways to solve this problem. Many packaging companies are developing new methods. Introductive films(薄膜) of production are worth considering as they can provide not only the protection required by food products, but also high-quality printed designs. Plastics also offer a way for consumers to have the best of both worlds—product protection and environment protection.
Other recyclable and energy recoverable methods exist. Or we can simply reduce the volume of packaging used—perhaps a film bag without the addition of a box as well. While we are likely to see less extravagant(浪费的) packaging on stores’ shelves, it is sure to be creative.
[任务说明]
1) 概括短文的内容要点,该部分的词数大约为30; 2) 请以“包装”为话题,写一篇英语短文,简要说明你对各种商品过度包装所造成的影响的一些看法。该部分的词数大约为120;
[写作要求]
1) 你可以使用实例、反面论证或其他论述方法支持你的论点,也可以参照阅读材料的内容,但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子; 2) 标题自定。
●写作策略
★要点概括策略
任务说明要求用大约30个词概括短文内容要点,实质上也就是要求概括该短文的主旨大意或主题思想。主旨大意有引领全文的作用,文意的延伸、情节的发展、情感的流露、观点的表达都是在主旨大意的引导下逐层展开的。那该如何确定主旨大意呢?常见方法有三种:
(1)首句确定法:往往作者在文章的开头就简明扼要概括文章大意,用展现在读者面前的第一个句子来表达自己的观点,因此它往往成为名副其实的主旨大意句。
(2)末句确定法:有时侯,文章的最后一个句子也可对全文进行概括和总结,因而理解末句也是概括短文内容要点的一个好方法。
(3)综合确定法:对于不少观点含蓄性的文章,其首末句不一定是主旨句。这时,读者在通读全文掌握大意的基础上,认真思考作者想说明什么、表扬什么、批评什么,进而准确客观地概括文章主旨大意。
针对本文而言,我们就要采用综合法来确定该短文内容要点。可以这样分析该短文的行文结构:第一句呈现问题(商品过分包装);第二句提出观点(解决问题的重要性);第三句属于过渡句,主要从整体上说明问题的解决;接着,用四句话介绍解决商品过分包装问题的两种方法,即introduce plastic films和reduce the volume of packaging;最后,进一步强调解决问题的重要性:只要商品的包装上不会再有过分浪费,那这样的包装就很独特,有价值。
由此,可以概括短文内容要点如下:Many creative ways are being considered to solve the problem of too much product packaging, such as introducing plastic films and reducing the packaging volume.
★写作技巧点拨
(1) 词语搜索:packaging companies(包装公司); too much packaging(过分包装); solve the problem (解决问题); think of ways (想办法); pay attention to (重视); attract customers(吸引顾客); a waste of money (浪费资金); do harm/good to(对……有坏处/好处); pollute environment (污染环境); satisfy one’s needs (满足需要); make a difference (大有作为); take effective measures (采取有效措施); provide (提供)
(2) 句型搜索:with the development of…(随着……的发展); make it possible for us to do (……使我们有可能……); it is important for us to… (我们干……很重要); In order to…, we should… (为了……我们一定要……); not only…but also… (不仅……而且)
(3)组句成篇:(串联用词语:I think; in my opinion; therefore; first of all; also; too; as well; besides; in addition; however; on the other hand; in all; still)
(4)单句表达:(将下列句子译成英语)
1.消费者总是抱怨过多的包装增加了食品的费用。
2.人们似乎还没有意识到这个问题的严重性。
3.过多的包装给我们的环境带来许多危害。
4.我们应该采取有效措施来阻止商品过分包装。
5.相信我们的努力在同商品过分包装的斗争中会大有作为。
参考答案:
1. The consumers always complain that too much packaging increases the cost of the food.
2. People don’t seem to realize how serious the problem is.
3. Too much packaging does a lot of harm to our environment.
4. We should take many effective measures to stop products from being overpackaged.
5. It is believed that our efforts to fight against too much packaging can make a difference.
●学生习作
Many packaging companies have realized the problem of too much packaging and they are seeking possible ways to solve the problem to cater for customers.
Nowadays, many companies pay too much attention to the packaging of their products in order to attract customers. Sometimes, packaging costs more than products, which makes it possible to cause a waste of money and time. Besides, too much packaging does great harm to our environment.
Fortunately, more and more people begin to realize the disadvantages of too much packaging. They know that they shouldn’t satisfy their needs at the cost of the environment, and①too much packaging is actually of no practical use. They also think that many effective measures should be taken to limit it.
In all, let’s work together to fight against too much packaging. I believe our efforts can make a difference.
●习作点评
★亮点欣赏:①本篇文章结构严谨,层次分明,要点全面,论证有力。全文共分四个自然段。第一段开门见山提出观点(问题正得以解决);第二段陈述问题的产生原因及其危害性;第三段进一步说明解决问题的必要性;第四段与第一段前后呼应,概括介绍解决问题的信心。②高级词汇:pay too much attention to; cater for; do great harm to; of no practical use; fight against等。③较复杂结构:They also think that…(that引导宾语从句);makes it possible to(it句型);…which makes our spare time richer…(定语从句);被动语态。④过渡词语:also; besides; fortunately; sometimes; in all。
★错误更正:①and和too之间应加上连接词that。因为that在这里引导两个并列的宾语从句。
★锦上添花:…, let’s work together to fight against too much packaging.改为 It is high time for us to fight against too much packaging,这样对于全文可能会起到更好的作用。
●写作例题
请根据以下的任务说明和写作要求,写一篇150词左右的英语短文。
[阅读材料]
I am not surprised that 75% of British consumers(消费者) feel products have too much packaging. It’s important to consider ways to solve this problem. Many packaging companies are developing new methods. Introductive films(薄膜) of production are worth considering as they can provide not only the protection required by food products, but also high-quality printed designs. Plastics also offer a way for consumers to have the best of both worlds—product protection and environment protection.
Other recyclable and energy recoverable methods exist. Or we can simply reduce the volume of packaging used—perhaps a film bag without the addition of a box as well. While we are likely to see less extravagant(浪费的) packaging on stores’ shelves, it is sure to be creative.
[任务说明]
1) 概括短文的内容要点,该部分的词数大约为30; 2) 请以“包装”为话题,写一篇英语短文,简要说明你对各种商品过度包装所造成的影响的一些看法。该部分的词数大约为120;
[写作要求]
1) 你可以使用实例、反面论证或其他论述方法支持你的论点,也可以参照阅读材料的内容,但不要抄袭阅读材料中的句子; 2) 标题自定。
●写作策略
★要点概括策略
任务说明要求用大约30个词概括短文内容要点,实质上也就是要求概括该短文的主旨大意或主题思想。主旨大意有引领全文的作用,文意的延伸、情节的发展、情感的流露、观点的表达都是在主旨大意的引导下逐层展开的。那该如何确定主旨大意呢?常见方法有三种:
(1)首句确定法:往往作者在文章的开头就简明扼要概括文章大意,用展现在读者面前的第一个句子来表达自己的观点,因此它往往成为名副其实的主旨大意句。
(2)末句确定法:有时侯,文章的最后一个句子也可对全文进行概括和总结,因而理解末句也是概括短文内容要点的一个好方法。
(3)综合确定法:对于不少观点含蓄性的文章,其首末句不一定是主旨句。这时,读者在通读全文掌握大意的基础上,认真思考作者想说明什么、表扬什么、批评什么,进而准确客观地概括文章主旨大意。
针对本文而言,我们就要采用综合法来确定该短文内容要点。可以这样分析该短文的行文结构:第一句呈现问题(商品过分包装);第二句提出观点(解决问题的重要性);第三句属于过渡句,主要从整体上说明问题的解决;接着,用四句话介绍解决商品过分包装问题的两种方法,即introduce plastic films和reduce the volume of packaging;最后,进一步强调解决问题的重要性:只要商品的包装上不会再有过分浪费,那这样的包装就很独特,有价值。
由此,可以概括短文内容要点如下:Many creative ways are being considered to solve the problem of too much product packaging, such as introducing plastic films and reducing the packaging volume.
★写作技巧点拨
(1) 词语搜索:packaging companies(包装公司); too much packaging(过分包装); solve the problem (解决问题); think of ways (想办法); pay attention to (重视); attract customers(吸引顾客); a waste of money (浪费资金); do harm/good to(对……有坏处/好处); pollute environment (污染环境); satisfy one’s needs (满足需要); make a difference (大有作为); take effective measures (采取有效措施); provide (提供)
(2) 句型搜索:with the development of…(随着……的发展); make it possible for us to do (……使我们有可能……); it is important for us to… (我们干……很重要); In order to…, we should… (为了……我们一定要……); not only…but also… (不仅……而且)
(3)组句成篇:(串联用词语:I think; in my opinion; therefore; first of all; also; too; as well; besides; in addition; however; on the other hand; in all; still)
(4)单句表达:(将下列句子译成英语)
1.消费者总是抱怨过多的包装增加了食品的费用。
2.人们似乎还没有意识到这个问题的严重性。
3.过多的包装给我们的环境带来许多危害。
4.我们应该采取有效措施来阻止商品过分包装。
5.相信我们的努力在同商品过分包装的斗争中会大有作为。
参考答案:
1. The consumers always complain that too much packaging increases the cost of the food.
2. People don’t seem to realize how serious the problem is.
3. Too much packaging does a lot of harm to our environment.
4. We should take many effective measures to stop products from being overpackaged.
5. It is believed that our efforts to fight against too much packaging can make a difference.
●学生习作
Many packaging companies have realized the problem of too much packaging and they are seeking possible ways to solve the problem to cater for customers.
Nowadays, many companies pay too much attention to the packaging of their products in order to attract customers. Sometimes, packaging costs more than products, which makes it possible to cause a waste of money and time. Besides, too much packaging does great harm to our environment.
Fortunately, more and more people begin to realize the disadvantages of too much packaging. They know that they shouldn’t satisfy their needs at the cost of the environment, and①too much packaging is actually of no practical use. They also think that many effective measures should be taken to limit it.
In all, let’s work together to fight against too much packaging. I believe our efforts can make a difference.
●习作点评
★亮点欣赏:①本篇文章结构严谨,层次分明,要点全面,论证有力。全文共分四个自然段。第一段开门见山提出观点(问题正得以解决);第二段陈述问题的产生原因及其危害性;第三段进一步说明解决问题的必要性;第四段与第一段前后呼应,概括介绍解决问题的信心。②高级词汇:pay too much attention to; cater for; do great harm to; of no practical use; fight against等。③较复杂结构:They also think that…(that引导宾语从句);makes it possible to(it句型);…which makes our spare time richer…(定语从句);被动语态。④过渡词语:also; besides; fortunately; sometimes; in all。
★错误更正:①and和too之间应加上连接词that。因为that在这里引导两个并列的宾语从句。
★锦上添花:…, let’s work together to fight against too much packaging.改为 It is high time for us to fight against too much packaging,这样对于全文可能会起到更好的作用。