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Hello everyone.My name is Vivian.I’m twelve years old.And I’m always in a good mood.I’m very active.I’m not very tall.I have a pair of black eyes，short hair and small mouth.
I’m diligent middle school student.I have many subjects in school.My favorite subject is English.I enjoy studying English.Because it’s interesting and easy for me.I work hard at my lessons.And I have many good friends.
JingYijing is my best friend.Her has an interesting English name—Eleven.She is taller and fatter than me.She always shares good and bad time with me.In my spare time，I often watch movie with her.
I have many hobbies.But I often listen to music and read books in my life.My favorite sport is riding bike.
I also have a very happy family.So，I’m lucky.Do you like me？
刘志新老师点评：
文章行文流畅，层次清晰，结构紧凑。注意：1. 英文标点之后要空一格； 2. 表示泛指的单数可数名词前必须要有不定冠词；3. “更胖”用“heavier”比“fatter”委婉礼貌些；4.“看电影”用“see movies”，“看电视”用“watch TV”。
Hello everyone. My name is Vivian. I’m twelve years old. And I’m always in a good mood. I’m very active. I’m not very tall， but I’m very beautiful. I have a pair of black eyes，short hair and a small mouth.
I’m a diligent middle school student. I have many subjects in school. My favorite subject is English. I enjoy studying English， because it’s interesting and easy for me. I work hard at my lessons. And I have many good friends.
Jing Yijing is my best friend. She has an interesting English name—Eleven. She is taller and heavier than me. She always shares good and bad time with me. In my spare time， I often see movies/watch TV with her.
I have many hobbies. But I often listen to music and read books if I’m free. My favorite sport is riding a bike.
I also have a very happy family. So， I’m lucky. Do you like me？
Hello everyone.My name is Vivian.I’m twelve years old.And I’m always in a good mood.I’m very active.I’m not very tall.I have a pair of black eyes，short hair and small mouth.
I’m diligent middle school student.I have many subjects in school.My favorite subject is English.I enjoy studying English.Because it’s interesting and easy for me.I work hard at my lessons.And I have many good friends.
JingYijing is my best friend.Her has an interesting English name—Eleven.She is taller and fatter than me.She always shares good and bad time with me.In my spare time，I often watch movie with her.
I have many hobbies.But I often listen to music and read books in my life.My favorite sport is riding bike.
I also have a very happy family.So，I’m lucky.Do you like me？
刘志新老师点评：
文章行文流畅，层次清晰，结构紧凑。注意：1. 英文标点之后要空一格； 2. 表示泛指的单数可数名词前必须要有不定冠词；3. “更胖”用“heavier”比“fatter”委婉礼貌些；4.“看电影”用“see movies”，“看电视”用“watch TV”。
Hello everyone. My name is Vivian. I’m twelve years old. And I’m always in a good mood. I’m very active. I’m not very tall， but I’m very beautiful. I have a pair of black eyes，short hair and a small mouth.
I’m a diligent middle school student. I have many subjects in school. My favorite subject is English. I enjoy studying English， because it’s interesting and easy for me. I work hard at my lessons. And I have many good friends.
Jing Yijing is my best friend. She has an interesting English name—Eleven. She is taller and heavier than me. She always shares good and bad time with me. In my spare time， I often see movies/watch TV with her.
I have many hobbies. But I often listen to music and read books if I’m free. My favorite sport is riding a bike.
I also have a very happy family. So， I’m lucky. Do you like me？