编者推荐:此文亮点是卒章“我的长大是以爸妈的衰老为代价的”——此前双管齐下,在写“爸妈衰老”细节时,同时写“我长大”的表现。此文还需要升格:将概述改为描述,从所写的事中,选择其一展开——变纵向排列为展示横截面。标题宜实,可改为“爸爸开始谢顶”。 Editor’s recommendation: The highlight of this article is “I grew up with my parents’ senility at the expense of aging.” - After a two-pronged approach, when I wrote “My parents’ aging,” I also wrote “I grew up. ”Performance. This article also needs to be upgraded: change the outline to a description. From what you have written, choose one of the things you want to do—changing vertically to show the cross section. The headline should be correct and can be changed to “Daddy begins to greet the top”.