此文的亮点是“爸爸拿着剪刀尖,把剪刀柄伸向妈妈”——谨防对方受伤害。后面的几件事——妈妈为爸爸“找几双鞋垫”和爸爸为了不影响妈妈休息“借看报之名,到客厅里去睡”——都具有“谨防对方受伤害”属性。定向选材,难能可贵。此文还需要升格:文中有关“平淡”的议论,略显宽泛,应做“呵护对方,谨防伤害”的议论——所议对所叙应在契合中点化。标题更换为“剪刀柄的爱……”。 The highlight of this article is “Dad holding scissors sharply, extending the handle of the scissors to his mother ” - Beware of the other side hurt. The following several things - mother to father “to find a pair of insoles ” and my father in order to not affect the mother to rest “lease to read the newspaper’s name, go to sleep in the living room ” - have “ to guard against the other side hurt ”Attributes. Directional materials are very valuable. This article also needs to be upgraded: The article’s arguments about “dull” are somewhat broad, and should be “care about each other, guard against injury” argument - the discussion should be in the midpoint of the agreement. Change the title to “Love of scissors handles...”.