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在读后续写备考中,笔者发现,大部分同学经过一段时间练习后,能够基本完成故事情节的架构并完成写作任务。但有的同学可能是东拼西凑,在凑够词数后就匆匆结尾,甚至还有部分同学没有完成结尾。虽然有部分基础较好的同学能在规定时间内结尾,但大多也只是一个简单的“自然式”结尾,勉强完成写作任务,不能给阅卷老师眼前一亮的感觉。为了帮助同学们写好续写的结尾,给文章起到“画龙点睛”的作用,笔者总结了三种简单易学又能有效点题的结尾方式。
一、用强调句型
强调句型“It is/was+被強调部分+that/who+其他部分”属于高级句型的一种。把这个句型用在结尾,强调故事的时间、人物或事情本身,能很好地起到点题的作用。以下是笔者积累的在不同主题的文章中经常用到的句子,仅供大家参考。
1. It was Tom’s selflessness that taught me the value of kindness. 正是Tom的无私使我明白了善良的宝贵。
2. It was on that day that I came to know a truth — a small act of kindness can make a big difference.正是在那一天,我领悟到了一个道理——小小善举可以给世界带来大不同。
3. It was a simple knot and an understanding heart that saved me from the awkward situation.正是这一个小小的绳结和一颗善解人意的心将我从尴尬中拯救出来。
4. It was with his father’s words that he realized family matters the most. 父亲的一席话让他意识到了家人才是世界上最重要的。
5. It was Henry’s kindness and understanding that made me feel the warmth from our family.是Henry的善意和理解让我真正感受到了来自家人的温暖。
6. It was the special experience that made me realize forgiving is an important virtue. 正是这次特别的经历使我明白了谅解是多么宝贵的品质。
7. It was their love and support that saw me through different odds all these years. 这么多年以来,是他们的爱与支持陪伴着我度过了艰难的时光。
如果是强调谓语,则要用助动词do, does, did。如:
8. Indeed, creativity and bravery do make a great difference in getting out of a fix. 确实,创意和勇敢是帮助我们摆脱困境的有力武器。(do强调make)
二、用名言名句
在写作中若能根据文章主题,恰当运用名言名句,有效点题,定能够吸引评卷者的眼球。在使用名言名句时,我们可以套用一个通用的固定句式:
Just as the saying goes,“Where there is a will, there is a way.”Now I couldn’t agree more with those words. 正如俗话所说,“有志者,事竟成。”现在我完全同意这句话。
我们只需根据具体情况,从自己的资料库中选择合适的谚语即可,以下是笔者整理的比较适合用在高考读后续写中的谚语,仅供参考。
1. Roses given, fragrance in hand.赠人玫瑰,手有余香。
2. No pains, no gains./ No sweet without sweat. 没有付出,就没有回报。
3. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难见真情。
4. Never judge from appearance. 不可以貌取人。
5. Confidence in yourself is the first step on the road to success. 自信是成功的第一步。
6. Genius is nothing but labor and diligence. 天才出自勤奋。
7. Honesty is the best policy. 诚为上策。
8. Practice makes perfect. 熟能生巧。
三、用修辞手法
以下是可以用于读后续写结尾的一些美词美句,它们通过运用多种修辞手法让文章更有画面感和美感,既能点题又能大大加强文章的可读性。
1. Today’s experience was like an everlasting flower, blooming in the river of my memories. 今天的经历将会像是一朵永不凋谢的花朵,永远绽放在我的记忆里。(比喻)(bloom开花)
2. This special experience left a lasting mental picture in my mind, which I will never forget. 今日的这次特别的经历给我留下了刻骨铭心的记忆,我将永生难忘。(比喻) 3. With laughter lingering in the room, their sincere friendship blossomed in the summer like a flower that never fades. 伴随着笑声回荡在房间里,他们真挚的友谊之花盛开在这个夏季,永不凋败。(比喻)(linger回荡,徘徊; blossom开花)
4. Alex’s beam of smile seemed to wipe off Theo’s frustration and he was really expecting to be the next champion. Alex的微笑冲散了Theo心中的阴霾,他又开始对下一次的胜利充满期待。(拟人,比喻)(frustration沮丧)
5. His words floated in the wind like a bird’s happy song. 他的话语回荡在风中,就像鸟儿的歌声一样欢快动听。(比喻)
6. Follow your dream and the universe will open doors where there are only walls. 追随你的梦想吧,宇宙会在原本只有墙的地方为你敞开大门。(拟人)
7. Love matters more than anything, which can conquer /overcome /get the better of any difficulty. 爱胜过一切,它能打败世间的任何困难。(拟人)
8. The cloud removed instantly, sunshine landed on the happy teardrops in my eyes. 刹那间,乌云散去,阳光洒在了我充满喜悦的泪水上。(拟人)
此外,用“only +状语”开头的倒装,以及not only ... but also…连接句子时的倒装,也是一种不错的结尾。如:
Only when we open up the door of our heart can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love. 只有当我们打开心门,我们才能沐浴在阳光中享受爱的温暖。(比喻;倒装)
总之,高考续写的方向往往是积极向上的,结尾时通常弘扬一种正面的情感,如,“助人为乐、勤奋、友情、亲情和自我成长”等。如2021年新高考全国Ⅰ卷读后续写讲述的是孩子们精心为妈妈准备母亲节早餐,经历一番波折之后,最终以阖家欢乐结尾。显然,其主题为“亲情”。我們可以套用上述这个句子“With laughter lingering around the room, the love among family blossomed in the summer like a flower that never fades.”望我们多多背诵,多多积累,建立自己的语料库,并在考试中根据具体情况选用合适的句式结尾,争取在读后续写中取得理想的分数。
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一、用强调句型
强调句型“It is/was+被強调部分+that/who+其他部分”属于高级句型的一种。把这个句型用在结尾,强调故事的时间、人物或事情本身,能很好地起到点题的作用。以下是笔者积累的在不同主题的文章中经常用到的句子,仅供大家参考。
1. It was Tom’s selflessness that taught me the value of kindness. 正是Tom的无私使我明白了善良的宝贵。
2. It was on that day that I came to know a truth — a small act of kindness can make a big difference.正是在那一天,我领悟到了一个道理——小小善举可以给世界带来大不同。
3. It was a simple knot and an understanding heart that saved me from the awkward situation.正是这一个小小的绳结和一颗善解人意的心将我从尴尬中拯救出来。
4. It was with his father’s words that he realized family matters the most. 父亲的一席话让他意识到了家人才是世界上最重要的。
5. It was Henry’s kindness and understanding that made me feel the warmth from our family.是Henry的善意和理解让我真正感受到了来自家人的温暖。
6. It was the special experience that made me realize forgiving is an important virtue. 正是这次特别的经历使我明白了谅解是多么宝贵的品质。
7. It was their love and support that saw me through different odds all these years. 这么多年以来,是他们的爱与支持陪伴着我度过了艰难的时光。
如果是强调谓语,则要用助动词do, does, did。如:
8. Indeed, creativity and bravery do make a great difference in getting out of a fix. 确实,创意和勇敢是帮助我们摆脱困境的有力武器。(do强调make)
二、用名言名句
在写作中若能根据文章主题,恰当运用名言名句,有效点题,定能够吸引评卷者的眼球。在使用名言名句时,我们可以套用一个通用的固定句式:
Just as the saying goes,“Where there is a will, there is a way.”Now I couldn’t agree more with those words. 正如俗话所说,“有志者,事竟成。”现在我完全同意这句话。
我们只需根据具体情况,从自己的资料库中选择合适的谚语即可,以下是笔者整理的比较适合用在高考读后续写中的谚语,仅供参考。
1. Roses given, fragrance in hand.赠人玫瑰,手有余香。
2. No pains, no gains./ No sweet without sweat. 没有付出,就没有回报。
3. A friend in need is a friend indeed. 患难见真情。
4. Never judge from appearance. 不可以貌取人。
5. Confidence in yourself is the first step on the road to success. 自信是成功的第一步。
6. Genius is nothing but labor and diligence. 天才出自勤奋。
7. Honesty is the best policy. 诚为上策。
8. Practice makes perfect. 熟能生巧。
三、用修辞手法
以下是可以用于读后续写结尾的一些美词美句,它们通过运用多种修辞手法让文章更有画面感和美感,既能点题又能大大加强文章的可读性。
1. Today’s experience was like an everlasting flower, blooming in the river of my memories. 今天的经历将会像是一朵永不凋谢的花朵,永远绽放在我的记忆里。(比喻)(bloom开花)
2. This special experience left a lasting mental picture in my mind, which I will never forget. 今日的这次特别的经历给我留下了刻骨铭心的记忆,我将永生难忘。(比喻) 3. With laughter lingering in the room, their sincere friendship blossomed in the summer like a flower that never fades. 伴随着笑声回荡在房间里,他们真挚的友谊之花盛开在这个夏季,永不凋败。(比喻)(linger回荡,徘徊; blossom开花)
4. Alex’s beam of smile seemed to wipe off Theo’s frustration and he was really expecting to be the next champion. Alex的微笑冲散了Theo心中的阴霾,他又开始对下一次的胜利充满期待。(拟人,比喻)(frustration沮丧)
5. His words floated in the wind like a bird’s happy song. 他的话语回荡在风中,就像鸟儿的歌声一样欢快动听。(比喻)
6. Follow your dream and the universe will open doors where there are only walls. 追随你的梦想吧,宇宙会在原本只有墙的地方为你敞开大门。(拟人)
7. Love matters more than anything, which can conquer /overcome /get the better of any difficulty. 爱胜过一切,它能打败世间的任何困难。(拟人)
8. The cloud removed instantly, sunshine landed on the happy teardrops in my eyes. 刹那间,乌云散去,阳光洒在了我充满喜悦的泪水上。(拟人)
此外,用“only +状语”开头的倒装,以及not only ... but also…连接句子时的倒装,也是一种不错的结尾。如:
Only when we open up the door of our heart can we be bathed in the brilliant sunshine and enjoy the warmth of love. 只有当我们打开心门,我们才能沐浴在阳光中享受爱的温暖。(比喻;倒装)
总之,高考续写的方向往往是积极向上的,结尾时通常弘扬一种正面的情感,如,“助人为乐、勤奋、友情、亲情和自我成长”等。如2021年新高考全国Ⅰ卷读后续写讲述的是孩子们精心为妈妈准备母亲节早餐,经历一番波折之后,最终以阖家欢乐结尾。显然,其主题为“亲情”。我們可以套用上述这个句子“With laughter lingering around the room, the love among family blossomed in the summer like a flower that never fades.”望我们多多背诵,多多积累,建立自己的语料库,并在考试中根据具体情况选用合适的句式结尾,争取在读后续写中取得理想的分数。
责任编辑 蒋小青