刚收到编辑姐姐退回来的文章时,我心中是满满的失落感。不过,编辑姐姐说作为故事创作,我也写得很不错了,只是细节上还需斟酌,让我再仔细修改。我想反正能发表就行,修改一下有多难?编辑姐姐针对我的文章提出了好多问题,我便结合这些问题对文章进行了修改。我的叙述中有很多多余的文字,我便仔细读了几遍,把空洞模糊的句子全部删掉。读的过程中发现有的段落划分不合理,我又重新进行整理。在细节上,我特意加入了“爱心人士”这一角色,还把“网络直播”情节加了进来。改完之后我看着自己的作品,添了一分满意。 Just received the article returned by the editor sister, my heart is full of sense of loss. However, the editor’s sister said that as a story, I also write very well, but the details still need to be considered, let me carefully revised. Anyway, I would like to publish on the line, how difficult it is to amend? Editor’s sister raised a lot of questions for my article, I will combine these issues on the article was modified. There are a lot of extra words in my narrative, and I read it several times carefully, deleting all empty vague sentences. Some passages found in the process of reading are not properly defined, and I reorganized them. In the details, I deliberately joined the role of “loving people”, but also the “webcast” plot added. After finishing the change I looked at my own work and added a bit of satisfaction.