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  November 3rd, 2016 Thursday Sunny
  Last Friday, when I went home I saw our stairs were dirty. “Is Mum at home?” I said to myself. I knocked at the door, but no one answer①.
  I took out my key and opened the door. I saw a piece of paper on the table.
  “Hi, Lotus!I’m going to visit your grandmother. I will go by bus. I will come back in two days. You are 15 years old, aren’t you? Cook for yourself and take care of your sister. Mum.”
  Why not take us to go together? I rang my mother. “This time it is not a travel. I am visiting your grandmother in hospital. You are busy in study. Maybe next time I will take you two.”
  “Is grandmother in hospital? Why not tell me about it?” I was a bit unhappy.
  “You will finish junior study. I hope you will get better grades.” Mum said.
  “Grandmother is more important than my study. I love Grandma!” I cried.
  Mum has been in hospital. I said many words to my grandmother on phone. Next time, I visit② my grandma together with my sister.
  At③ Friday night, I cleaned the stairs. When my neighbor uncle Li came home, he said I was a good girl. I gave him a dirty look because he never cleans the stairs!
  湖南省永州市冷水灘区竹山桥学校九年级 屈玉莲
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  1. 优点:
  这是一篇小作者的日记,记录生活,情感真挚,把日常生活中的小事写得饶有趣味。
  2. 需要修改的地方:
  ①answer改为answered。要保持前后时态的一致性。
  ②visit改为will visit。next time(下一次)是表将来的时间状语,对应用将来时态的动词形式。注意:前面行文中出现了next time,且用对了时态,后面行文中却写错了时态,说明写作过程中存在粗心大意。
  ③At改为On。在英语中,具体到某个星期几的晚上,用介词on。
  3. 评分:
  按湖南省永州市中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准,本文修改前可得13分。
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