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由点到面写放焰火——不仅有“我”,还有“满村”,更有“爸妈”。文中过渡句“焰火照亮了整个美丽的村庄,照亮了人们一张张笑脸”——既见焰火又见人:“小男孩”“小姑娘”和“老人们”,也来“观焰火”,更显示“参与面”之广。结句“不知谁大叫了一声‘春节联欢晚会开始啦’,人们不约而同又去赶第二场大笑”,很有视觉和听觉冲击力——让读者自己感悟“社会主义新农村建设政策好哟”。此文还需要升格:倒数第二自然段中的“议论”文字,宜用“描述”文字取代。
Fireworks are written from point to surface - not only “I” but also “Manchu” and “Parents”. The transitional phrase in the article “fireworks illuminates the beautiful village and illuminates people’s smiling faces” - seeing fireworks and seeing people: “little boy”, “little girl” and “old people” and also “fireworks” “” It also shows the wide scope of “participation”. The sentence “I do not know who cried out ’The Spring Festival Gala started’, people spontaneously went to catch the second laugh,” very visual and auditory impact - let readers perceive “socialist new countryside construction policy is good Yo”. This article also needs to be upgraded: In the second paragraph of the penultimate paragraph, the word “talk” should be replaced by the word “description”.