论文部分内容阅读
【试题呈现】
“幽默感”被认为是人类最重要的品质之一。请你根据以下提示，结合校园生活中的一个事例，谈谈幽默感的作用。
In our daily life, humour is an important part for us. It’s not only one of the most valuable qualities, but also necessary for a delightful life. It is helpful in many ways, such as health, work or study and social communication.
注意：
1. 无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；
2. 内容必须结合校园生活中的一个事例；
3. 词数为120左右。
提示词：quality质量；品质 humorous幽默的 laughter笑声
【习作一】
The farthest distance in the world, is not between life and death. Yet, I stand in front of you, you don’t know that I’m humour.
It is universally acknowledged that humour is one of the most important quality of a person. To be frank, everyone has a gift for humor. In any case, we should be humorous, even as we are angry about others.
The power of the humor is so strong that you can’t imagine. Not only it can help a man out of trouble, but also can it build up someone’s confidence.
To be specific, one of my best friends Tom can use the power of humor as perfect as possible. Once because of my careless, I pushed him down to the ground. But before I could apologize to him, he said to me with a smile: “I can’t fly, please don’t help me flying next time.” Just a simple word kept my spirit alive.
As far as I’m concerned, humor is the sunlight when we get in darkness. Everyone should learn it by heart.
（新洲一中 叶文韬）
点评 这是一篇中档作文。其优点如下。
1. 语言基本表达流畅，层次基本分明；结合了生活中的事例，合乎题目要求。
2. 作者运用了一些高级词汇和短语, 如：universally acknowledged，to be frank，imagine，has a gift for，to be specific，in any case，build up confidence，as far as I’m concerned，by heart等。
3. 作者尝试运用了一些较复杂的句子结构。如：
It is universally acknowledged that ... （名词性从句）
The power of the humor is so strong that ... （so ... that ... 句型）
Not only ... but also ... （并列句）
But before I could apologize ... （状语从句）
不足之处如下。
1. 文章的导入部分过于冗长，特别是第一段，与整篇文章没有关联，可以删掉。英语作文中，不需要很多的语句甚至段落来引入主题，用一两句话尽快地切入主题即可。
2. 该生有些地方用词不够准确、语法方面有些不足而导致句子结构出现一些错误。如：
... one of the most important quality ... 应改为 ... one of the most important qualities ... （可数名词的单复数问题）
Not only it can help a man out of trouble, but also can it build up ... 应改为Not only can it help a man out of trouble, but also it can build up ... （倒装的语法知识记混淆了）
Once because of my careless ... 应改为Once because of my carelessness ... （单词记忆不准确）
... please don’t help me flying ... 应改为 ... please don’t help me fly ... （help的用法记错了）
3. 有些地方语句间的衔接不够紧凑。例如： To be frank, everyone has a gift for humor. In any case, we should be humorous, ... 不妨修改为：To be frank, everyone has a gift for humor. But not everyone can make good use of it. In any case, we should learn to be humorous, ... 或者改为But what really matters is how we learn to make good use of the gift.
【习作二】
A sense of humour is of great importance in our daily life, with whose help we can transform the really embarrassing situation into a pleasant one.
My friend Mike must benefit greatly from the quality. He is kind but overweight, which brings him a lot of trouble. Once one of my classmates laughed at him, “Why are you so fat?”We all stopped to stare at him, wondering how Mike would answer the question. He just said in a calm voice, “Well, it’s because my size must be large enough to hold my large heart of love.”Hearing his words, we burst into laughter. Not only did Mike get rid of the joke, but also he managed to ease the embarrassing situation.
What an important part humor plays in our daily life! Why not possess a sense of humor and go along the road of life with happiness all the way?
（新洲一中 涂孟）
点评 这是一篇高分作文。
1. 本文语言简炼；行文流畅；表意连贯；很有条理。
2. 文中使用的词汇极为丰富、准确。如：transform，embarrassing，benefit，wonder，ease，possess，of great importance，laugh at，burst into laughter，get rid of，play an important part等，不难看出，该生具有扎实的语言基础知识和语言运用能力。
3. 成功使用了较多的、较复杂的句式结构。如：
... , with whose help we can ... （介词+关系代词引导的定语从句）
... , which brings him a lot of trouble. （定语从句）
... , wondering how Mike would ... （V-ing形式作状语、宾语从句）
... be large enough to hold my large heart ... （动词不定式）
Hearing his words, we ... （V-ing形式作状语）
Not only did Mike get ... （倒装句）
What an important part humor plays ... （感叹句、定语从句）
“幽默感”被认为是人类最重要的品质之一。请你根据以下提示，结合校园生活中的一个事例，谈谈幽默感的作用。
In our daily life, humour is an important part for us. It’s not only one of the most valuable qualities, but also necessary for a delightful life. It is helpful in many ways, such as health, work or study and social communication.
注意：
1. 无须写标题，不得照抄英语提示语；
2. 内容必须结合校园生活中的一个事例；
3. 词数为120左右。
提示词：quality质量；品质 humorous幽默的 laughter笑声
【习作一】
The farthest distance in the world, is not between life and death. Yet, I stand in front of you, you don’t know that I’m humour.
It is universally acknowledged that humour is one of the most important quality of a person. To be frank, everyone has a gift for humor. In any case, we should be humorous, even as we are angry about others.
The power of the humor is so strong that you can’t imagine. Not only it can help a man out of trouble, but also can it build up someone’s confidence.
To be specific, one of my best friends Tom can use the power of humor as perfect as possible. Once because of my careless, I pushed him down to the ground. But before I could apologize to him, he said to me with a smile: “I can’t fly, please don’t help me flying next time.” Just a simple word kept my spirit alive.
As far as I’m concerned, humor is the sunlight when we get in darkness. Everyone should learn it by heart.
（新洲一中 叶文韬）
点评 这是一篇中档作文。其优点如下。
1. 语言基本表达流畅，层次基本分明；结合了生活中的事例，合乎题目要求。
2. 作者运用了一些高级词汇和短语, 如：universally acknowledged，to be frank，imagine，has a gift for，to be specific，in any case，build up confidence，as far as I’m concerned，by heart等。
3. 作者尝试运用了一些较复杂的句子结构。如：
It is universally acknowledged that ... （名词性从句）
The power of the humor is so strong that ... （so ... that ... 句型）
Not only ... but also ... （并列句）
But before I could apologize ... （状语从句）
不足之处如下。
1. 文章的导入部分过于冗长，特别是第一段，与整篇文章没有关联，可以删掉。英语作文中，不需要很多的语句甚至段落来引入主题，用一两句话尽快地切入主题即可。
2. 该生有些地方用词不够准确、语法方面有些不足而导致句子结构出现一些错误。如：
... one of the most important quality ... 应改为 ... one of the most important qualities ... （可数名词的单复数问题）
Not only it can help a man out of trouble, but also can it build up ... 应改为Not only can it help a man out of trouble, but also it can build up ... （倒装的语法知识记混淆了）
Once because of my careless ... 应改为Once because of my carelessness ... （单词记忆不准确）
... please don’t help me flying ... 应改为 ... please don’t help me fly ... （help的用法记错了）
3. 有些地方语句间的衔接不够紧凑。例如： To be frank, everyone has a gift for humor. In any case, we should be humorous, ... 不妨修改为：To be frank, everyone has a gift for humor. But not everyone can make good use of it. In any case, we should learn to be humorous, ... 或者改为But what really matters is how we learn to make good use of the gift.
【习作二】
A sense of humour is of great importance in our daily life, with whose help we can transform the really embarrassing situation into a pleasant one.
My friend Mike must benefit greatly from the quality. He is kind but overweight, which brings him a lot of trouble. Once one of my classmates laughed at him, “Why are you so fat?”We all stopped to stare at him, wondering how Mike would answer the question. He just said in a calm voice, “Well, it’s because my size must be large enough to hold my large heart of love.”Hearing his words, we burst into laughter. Not only did Mike get rid of the joke, but also he managed to ease the embarrassing situation.
What an important part humor plays in our daily life! Why not possess a sense of humor and go along the road of life with happiness all the way?
（新洲一中 涂孟）
点评 这是一篇高分作文。
1. 本文语言简炼；行文流畅；表意连贯；很有条理。
2. 文中使用的词汇极为丰富、准确。如：transform，embarrassing，benefit，wonder，ease，possess，of great importance，laugh at，burst into laughter，get rid of，play an important part等，不难看出，该生具有扎实的语言基础知识和语言运用能力。
3. 成功使用了较多的、较复杂的句式结构。如：
... , with whose help we can ... （介词+关系代词引导的定语从句）
... , which brings him a lot of trouble. （定语从句）
... , wondering how Mike would ... （V-ing形式作状语、宾语从句）
... be large enough to hold my large heart ... （动词不定式）
Hearing his words, we ... （V-ing形式作状语）
Not only did Mike get ... （倒装句）
What an important part humor plays ... （感叹句、定语从句）