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同学们经常会被问及将来打算干什么。那现在大家就都来谈谈自己的理想吧！以理想为题写一篇作文。要求：60~80词左右。
I Want to be a Policewoman
I want to be policewoman. Because I like to help with people. I like dangerous work. I think I will be able to catch the thief. Because I can run very fast. This is a very interesting things. Maybe I will become a teacher. I can work with children. I love children, so I’ll be happy. But I think I can’t do dangerous things. So I want to be policewoman.
老师说： be的后面应该加a，英语中，可数名词使用时，要么加冠词，要么用复数形式，很显然这里应该用冠词；动词help后面可以直接接名词，如果帮助某人关于某一学科，就用with 加学科，而这里不是这样的，直接去掉with就可以；things 与前面的is显然不搭配，应该用单数thing；can表示能够时，不可以用在将来时的句子中，应该换成will; But I think I can’t do dangerous things.这句话的意思是想说“自己就不能去做那些危险的工作吗”，将来时中不可以用can’t，这句话可以这样写, But I think I won’t do such dangerous things； be 的后面应该加冠词a，这个问题前面已经说过了。从这篇作文可以看出作者是一个活泼、好动、乐于助人的快乐孩子，希望她能努力实现自己的梦想!下面是修改后的作文。
I Want to be a Policewoman
I want to a policewoman. Because I’d like to help people in trouble. I like dangerous work. I think I will be able to catch the thief. Because I can run very fast. This is a very nervous and interesting job. Maybe I will become a teacher. I will work with children together. I love children, so I’ll be happy. But I won’t do such dangerous work! So I really want tobea policewoman!
I Want to be a Policewoman
I want to be policewoman. Because I like to help with people. I like dangerous work. I think I will be able to catch the thief. Because I can run very fast. This is a very interesting things. Maybe I will become a teacher. I can work with children. I love children, so I’ll be happy. But I think I can’t do dangerous things. So I want to be policewoman.
老师说： be的后面应该加a，英语中，可数名词使用时，要么加冠词，要么用复数形式，很显然这里应该用冠词；动词help后面可以直接接名词，如果帮助某人关于某一学科，就用with 加学科，而这里不是这样的，直接去掉with就可以；things 与前面的is显然不搭配，应该用单数thing；can表示能够时，不可以用在将来时的句子中，应该换成will; But I think I can’t do dangerous things.这句话的意思是想说“自己就不能去做那些危险的工作吗”，将来时中不可以用can’t，这句话可以这样写, But I think I won’t do such dangerous things； be 的后面应该加冠词a，这个问题前面已经说过了。从这篇作文可以看出作者是一个活泼、好动、乐于助人的快乐孩子，希望她能努力实现自己的梦想!下面是修改后的作文。
I Want to be a Policewoman
I want to a policewoman. Because I’d like to help people in trouble. I like dangerous work. I think I will be able to catch the thief. Because I can run very fast. This is a very nervous and interesting job. Maybe I will become a teacher. I will work with children together. I love children, so I’ll be happy. But I won’t do such dangerous work! So I really want tobea policewoman!