【名师画板】学会围绕文题组织材料,写出的文章才不会跑题。本文的内容紧紧围绕“流泪”中心词展开,能够把“为什么流泪、为谁流泪”交代清楚。但在行文的过程中,因缺少细节描写,那种无声的感动,就体现得不够突出。请你细细品读一下作者的原文和作者参照老师的提示完成的修改文,你一定会从中悟出许多修改作文的窍门。 [Famous drawing board] learn to organize materials around the topic, the article will not write out the problem. The contents of this article focus on “tears ” center words start, able to “why tears, tears for whom ” account clearly. However, in the process of writing, due to lack of detail description, the kind of silent move, it is not reflected enough. Please read carefully the author’s original text and the author’s reference to the teacher’s prompt to complete the revision of the text, you will recognize a lot of tips to modify the composition.