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任何一个优秀的书面表达都是一个整体，在句子、主题、序列、过渡和适当的段落之间互相呼应。换句话说，一篇好文章是由一组句子和段落，围绕一个中心主题，以逻辑的指导下排列的，过渡相连接，并通过适当的单词和短语来表达出来的。
如果一个书面表达缺乏一个不变的主题，就成了一个乱七八糟不相干的词，短语和句子，在一个非常现实的的意义上，不能被称为一个整体的组合。下面是一个例子，从中我们可以清楚地看到缺少一个统一的主题，是书面表达的灾难：
Most students who enter this university are from the country. When there is a drought, there will be no crops. We don’t like the food at the school canteen at all. I went to the cinema last night and enjoyed every minute of the film. In the last thirty years or so, some places in the south have developed their industries quickly.
以下是另一个例子，在相关的句子，也就是说，在一个主题或中心思想的支配中，没有一个正确的顺序排列。换句话说，缺乏逻辑顺序：
In the last thirty years or so, some places in the south of the country have developed their industries quickly. What’s more, the industrial development has caused serious pollution. The number of people there, however, has increased even faster. As a result, a lot of money is needed to stop the pollution there. Therefore, their life hasn’t improved much.
从以上两个例子中，我们可以看到一个专题的一致性，并以书面的逻辑顺序的重要性。然而，只有他们不会做出良好的写作。在逻辑顺序安排相关的句子必须联系在一起，通过正确的凝聚力单词和短语。这是技术上所谓的凝聚力。让我们看看会发生什么，如果凝聚力缺席：
In the last thirty years or so, some places in the south of the country have developed their industries quickly. The number of people there has increased even faster. Their life hasn’t improved much. The industrial development has caused serious pollution. A lot of money is needed to stop the pollution there.
过渡段落奇怪清楚地显示在上面这段话。这使得上述下划线的单词和短语在该段有或没有产生了很大的区别。有了它们，和它们之间的关系得到了清楚地展示，这将是一个写作的优秀示例。
到现在为止，我们可以得出想要达到书面表达的整体性，那么写作主题的一致性，逻辑顺序，正确的凝聚力和用词是否恰当，缺少其中的任何一个将破坏整体的团结。
我的书面表达版本
The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.
However, the photo before us shows another story. The little girl removes a bag from her mother’s shoulder the moment she gets inside the room! Tired though she is, from a day’s work, Mom instantly feels warm and relieved from the pain in her back, feeling greatly rewarded for all she has done for her daughter.
This story reminds me of my own mother, who’s been doing everything for me even before I was born! She is kept busy 12 hours a day, practically doing two jobs at the same time, one as an office worker and the other as a housemaid. It is great of the girl to be able to understand her mother and does her little to help her. Now is the time for me to feel the pain in my mother’s back, and do my bit in return, to be a good daughter as well as a good student.
（作者，陈兰，盐城市英语教研室）
如果一个书面表达缺乏一个不变的主题，就成了一个乱七八糟不相干的词，短语和句子，在一个非常现实的的意义上，不能被称为一个整体的组合。下面是一个例子，从中我们可以清楚地看到缺少一个统一的主题，是书面表达的灾难：
Most students who enter this university are from the country. When there is a drought, there will be no crops. We don’t like the food at the school canteen at all. I went to the cinema last night and enjoyed every minute of the film. In the last thirty years or so, some places in the south have developed their industries quickly.
以下是另一个例子，在相关的句子，也就是说，在一个主题或中心思想的支配中，没有一个正确的顺序排列。换句话说，缺乏逻辑顺序：
In the last thirty years or so, some places in the south of the country have developed their industries quickly. What’s more, the industrial development has caused serious pollution. The number of people there, however, has increased even faster. As a result, a lot of money is needed to stop the pollution there. Therefore, their life hasn’t improved much.
从以上两个例子中，我们可以看到一个专题的一致性，并以书面的逻辑顺序的重要性。然而，只有他们不会做出良好的写作。在逻辑顺序安排相关的句子必须联系在一起，通过正确的凝聚力单词和短语。这是技术上所谓的凝聚力。让我们看看会发生什么，如果凝聚力缺席：
In the last thirty years or so, some places in the south of the country have developed their industries quickly. The number of people there has increased even faster. Their life hasn’t improved much. The industrial development has caused serious pollution. A lot of money is needed to stop the pollution there.
过渡段落奇怪清楚地显示在上面这段话。这使得上述下划线的单词和短语在该段有或没有产生了很大的区别。有了它们，和它们之间的关系得到了清楚地展示，这将是一个写作的优秀示例。
到现在为止，我们可以得出想要达到书面表达的整体性，那么写作主题的一致性，逻辑顺序，正确的凝聚力和用词是否恰当，缺少其中的任何一个将破坏整体的团结。
我的书面表达版本
The burden of students has been a hot topic for years, but the load of parents has received little attention, especially from their own children.
However, the photo before us shows another story. The little girl removes a bag from her mother’s shoulder the moment she gets inside the room! Tired though she is, from a day’s work, Mom instantly feels warm and relieved from the pain in her back, feeling greatly rewarded for all she has done for her daughter.
This story reminds me of my own mother, who’s been doing everything for me even before I was born! She is kept busy 12 hours a day, practically doing two jobs at the same time, one as an office worker and the other as a housemaid. It is great of the girl to be able to understand her mother and does her little to help her. Now is the time for me to feel the pain in my mother’s back, and do my bit in return, to be a good daughter as well as a good student.
（作者，陈兰，盐城市英语教研室）