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钟伍生 男,英文名为Billbell,现年41岁,湖南师范大学英语专业本科毕业。多年来,一直从事毕业班英语教学工作。多次被湖南省新宁县人民政府嘉奖。县级优秀教师,省级示范中学新宁一中“十佳标兵”。2007年起,被湖南省崀山实验学校高薪聘请,担任该校复习部首席英语教师。
题目要求:
假如你叫李明,你的好朋友张平生病在家,以下是关于学校期中考试的通知,请你根据该通知写一份80词左右的e-mail给张平,告诉他期中考试的情况。
通知
根据学期计划安排,学校行政部门研究决定全校于下星期三、四(2009年4月29~30号)举行期中考试,希望各班加强考前教育。
上午 (8:00-12:00) 下午(1:30-5:30)
星期三:语文、政治 物理、地理
星期四:英语、化学 数学、历史
湖南省崀山实验中学
2009年4月20号
原作
Mid-term Examination
Dear Zhang Ping,
Are you feeling any better? As you know, the mid-term examination is going to be held next week. So I’m writing the e-mail to tell you about it.
The examination will last two days, from Wednesday to Thursday next week. We’ll take Chinese, politics exams on Wednesday morning, geography and physics in the afternoon; while English, chemistry, math and history are to be tested on Thursday.
You will have to bring some necessary stationery. However, any textbooks and reference books are not allowed to be taken into the classroom for the examination.
Please don’t need to worry too much about it, for our teachers have told us that they are easy to pass only if we focus on the textbooks and notes. If you still have anything to ask me, please don’t hesitate to contact me by telephone or e-mail. My phone number is 0739-4811155.
Best wishes,
Yours
Li Ming
點评
1. 优点:
E-mail已经成为现代生活不可或缺的一部分,深受学生们的喜爱。虽说这是一封email,但足可以看出该同学的英语写作功底和平时喜欢积累语言素材的好习惯。在此信中该同学大胆并准确运用了课内外学习中所碰到的新单词、短语和句型。例如,stationery(文具)、reference books(参考书籍)、be not allowed to do something(严禁做某事)、as you know(正如你所知道的)、be to be tested(计划考试)、focus on(关注)。另外,最值得称道的是这封信层次分明,准确运用连接词so, while, however, for等,说事清楚明了。
2. 需要修改的地方:
最后一段显得罗嗦和文绉绉的,不如改成: Don’t worry about it, for our teachers have told us that they are easy to pass only when we focus on our textbooks and notes. If you want to know more, phone me please. My phone number is 0739-4811155. 这样更适合E-mail的简明扼要的语言特征。
3. 评分:
按照湖南省中考作文满分10分的评分标准,本文修改前可得9分。
钟伍生 男,英文名为Billbell,现年41岁,湖南师范大学英语专业本科毕业。多年来,一直从事毕业班英语教学工作。多次被湖南省新宁县人民政府嘉奖。县级优秀教师,省级示范中学新宁一中“十佳标兵”。2007年起,被湖南省崀山实验学校高薪聘请,担任该校复习部首席英语教师。
题目要求:
假如你叫李明,你的好朋友张平生病在家,以下是关于学校期中考试的通知,请你根据该通知写一份80词左右的e-mail给张平,告诉他期中考试的情况。
通知
根据学期计划安排,学校行政部门研究决定全校于下星期三、四(2009年4月29~30号)举行期中考试,希望各班加强考前教育。
上午 (8:00-12:00) 下午(1:30-5:30)
星期三:语文、政治 物理、地理
星期四:英语、化学 数学、历史
湖南省崀山实验中学
2009年4月20号
原作
Mid-term Examination
Dear Zhang Ping,
Are you feeling any better? As you know, the mid-term examination is going to be held next week. So I’m writing the e-mail to tell you about it.
The examination will last two days, from Wednesday to Thursday next week. We’ll take Chinese, politics exams on Wednesday morning, geography and physics in the afternoon; while English, chemistry, math and history are to be tested on Thursday.
You will have to bring some necessary stationery. However, any textbooks and reference books are not allowed to be taken into the classroom for the examination.
Please don’t need to worry too much about it, for our teachers have told us that they are easy to pass only if we focus on the textbooks and notes. If you still have anything to ask me, please don’t hesitate to contact me by telephone or e-mail. My phone number is 0739-4811155.
Best wishes,
Yours
Li Ming
點评
1. 优点:
E-mail已经成为现代生活不可或缺的一部分,深受学生们的喜爱。虽说这是一封email,但足可以看出该同学的英语写作功底和平时喜欢积累语言素材的好习惯。在此信中该同学大胆并准确运用了课内外学习中所碰到的新单词、短语和句型。例如,stationery(文具)、reference books(参考书籍)、be not allowed to do something(严禁做某事)、as you know(正如你所知道的)、be to be tested(计划考试)、focus on(关注)。另外,最值得称道的是这封信层次分明,准确运用连接词so, while, however, for等,说事清楚明了。
2. 需要修改的地方:
最后一段显得罗嗦和文绉绉的,不如改成: Don’t worry about it, for our teachers have told us that they are easy to pass only when we focus on our textbooks and notes. If you want to know more, phone me please. My phone number is 0739-4811155. 这样更适合E-mail的简明扼要的语言特征。
3. 评分:
按照湖南省中考作文满分10分的评分标准,本文修改前可得9分。