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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>;
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份,包括:学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱: zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com
来稿请寄: 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
男 1989年参加工作,中学高级教师、济宁市骨干教师、市级教学能手;在工作中立足实际,认真搞好教学,创造性地开展学校的教育教学、教改科研工作,在教育这片田园里勤奋耕耘,积极探索,不断改进教学手段,吸收先进的教育理念;在多年的英语教学工作中,积累了丰富的教学经验,形成了自己独特的教学方法;从教以来一直担任初中毕业班的教学工作,在历年的中考中,所执教的班级都取得了优异成绩,受到学校和社会各界的一致好评;先后在省级、国家级报刊发表论文一百多篇,现担任《英语周报》《英语辅导报》《学生英语报》《英语画刊》《英语园地》等多家报刊的特约编辑。
A Lesson to Me
This morning, I got up too late. So I rode my bike hurriedly to school.
There are two crossings on my way for① school. Because it was too late today, I decided go② on riding even when the light was red. I was lucky at the first crossing because the light was green. But at the second crossing I found the light was red. If I stopped to wait, I would be late for school. So I went on riding. Suddenly a car appeared with a loud noise of braking. I couldn’t stop my bike because③ the high speed. Then I hit the left front wheel of the car. Fortunately, I was all right. Soon a policeman came up. He and the driver criticized me for not waiting for the green light. Everyone looked at me at once. My face turned red. I realized what I did was wrong. How dangerous it was!
Though nothing serious happened, but④ it was a lesson to me. It told me that we must obey the traffic rules and value our life.
山東梁山杨营中学初三(6)班 于海洋
1. 优点:
全文语言朴实,自然流畅,意思连贯。小作者通过寥寥数语,向我们讲述了他的一个教训,文章虽短,却表达了一个道理:我们必须遵守交通规则,珍爱生命。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① for改为to, on one’s way to...意为“在去……的路上”;
② go改为to go, decide to do sth.意为“决定做……”;
③ because后加of, because后加从句,because of后加名词短语;
④ 去掉but, though和but不可连用,用其中之一就可表达“虽然……但是……”的意思。
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准,本文修改前可得13分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩; 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号;
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由; 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>;
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份,包括:学校、职务、职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱: zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com
来稿请寄: 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
男 1989年参加工作,中学高级教师、济宁市骨干教师、市级教学能手;在工作中立足实际,认真搞好教学,创造性地开展学校的教育教学、教改科研工作,在教育这片田园里勤奋耕耘,积极探索,不断改进教学手段,吸收先进的教育理念;在多年的英语教学工作中,积累了丰富的教学经验,形成了自己独特的教学方法;从教以来一直担任初中毕业班的教学工作,在历年的中考中,所执教的班级都取得了优异成绩,受到学校和社会各界的一致好评;先后在省级、国家级报刊发表论文一百多篇,现担任《英语周报》《英语辅导报》《学生英语报》《英语画刊》《英语园地》等多家报刊的特约编辑。
A Lesson to Me
This morning, I got up too late. So I rode my bike hurriedly to school.
There are two crossings on my way for① school. Because it was too late today, I decided go② on riding even when the light was red. I was lucky at the first crossing because the light was green. But at the second crossing I found the light was red. If I stopped to wait, I would be late for school. So I went on riding. Suddenly a car appeared with a loud noise of braking. I couldn’t stop my bike because③ the high speed. Then I hit the left front wheel of the car. Fortunately, I was all right. Soon a policeman came up. He and the driver criticized me for not waiting for the green light. Everyone looked at me at once. My face turned red. I realized what I did was wrong. How dangerous it was!
Though nothing serious happened, but④ it was a lesson to me. It told me that we must obey the traffic rules and value our life.
山東梁山杨营中学初三(6)班 于海洋
1. 优点:
全文语言朴实,自然流畅,意思连贯。小作者通过寥寥数语,向我们讲述了他的一个教训,文章虽短,却表达了一个道理:我们必须遵守交通规则,珍爱生命。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① for改为to, on one’s way to...意为“在去……的路上”;
② go改为to go, decide to do sth.意为“决定做……”;
③ because后加of, because后加从句,because of后加名词短语;
④ 去掉but, though和but不可连用,用其中之一就可表达“虽然……但是……”的意思。
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准,本文修改前可得13分。