《金秋的风》这首歌。原曲情绪比较明快、开朗、曲调也较抒情,民族风格较浓郁。但作为二段式的歌曲,主要问题是第二段旋律处理不当:较为零乱,不够顺畅,缺乏层次。现修改为另稿,供作、读者参考。修改意见如下: ①“秋光更比春光美,秋色更比春色浓”两句,基本上保留原曲,但两句的落音作了更替处理。因为这两句属对称型结构,第二句落在“5”音上为好(此处的 “Autumn Wind” song. The original song is more cheerful mood, cheerful, melody is more lyrical, more ethnic style. However, as a two-stage song, the main problem is the improper handling of the melody of the second paragraph: relatively messy, not smooth enough and lack of level. Now revised as another manuscript, for the reader’s reference. Amendments are as follows: ① “Autumn is more beautiful than the spring, autumn more concentrated than the spring” two, basically keep the original song, but the two fall altogether made a replacement deal. Because these two sentences are symmetrical, the second sentence falls on the “5” sound as well (here