判分理由:文体正宗,叙述有范中考判分:50分(满分50)第一次见到你,我11岁。窗外稀疏的阳光像一层亮釉涂在雪地上,我穿过弥漫着药水气味的走廊,推开那扇半掩着的门,看见了你。你安静地躺在小木床里,妈妈亲切地给你哼着童谣。我有些木然,爸爸拍拍我的头,说:“灵,这是你世界上最亲的人。” Judgment reasons: style is authentic, narrative Fan in the test points: 50 points (out of 50) for the first time to see you, I am 11 years old. The sparse sunlight out the window was like a layer of bright glaze on the snow. I walked through the corridor filled with syrup, pushed open the half-covered door and saw you. You lie quietly in a wooden bed, mom kindly give you a humming nursery rhyme. I’m a bit naive, my father patted my head and said: “Spirit, this is your most pro-people in the world.” "