前些日子,我的学生刘仲藜在《小学生读写》编辑部组织的第三届征文比赛中荣获了一等奖。望着鲜红的荣誉证书,我没有过多的喜悦——一切都在意料之中……开学伊始,得到要参加这次征文比赛的通知后,我马上组织学生行动起来。同学们也都很积极,纷纷踊跃交稿。我翻了一篇又一篇,可哪有一篇中意的?要么扣题不紧,要么结构杂乱,要么语言冗赘,最要紧的,是没有一点打动人心的地方!而这次征文的 A few days ago, my student Liu Zhongli won the first prize in the third essay competition organized by the Editorial Department of “Pupils Reading and Writing”. Looking at the certificate of bright red, I do not have too much joy - everything is expected ... ... at the beginning of the school, get notice to participate in the essay competition, I immediately organize students to act. Students are also very positive, have enthusiastically submitted. I turned over one article after another, but where is there a favorite? Or buckle is not tight, or messy structure, or language redundancy, the most important thing is not a little touching place! And this essay