What is the most important thing in the world？ I think it is healthy. If our healthy was take away. What should we do？
　　Therefore， I will give you some experiences. First， we should eat the healthy food. Such as vegetables， fruits and so on. Secondly， we should get many sleep. Allowing ourselves at least eight hours of sleeping each day. Finally， we should do exercises regularly. Life depends on exercise.
　　I think it is necessary to keep healthy for you. I hope that I will be helpful to you.
　　魏勇教师点评：
　　写作时，学生要牢记几个要素：人称、时态、语序、逻辑、搭配、语法。即人称前后的一致，时态前后的一致，陈述语序和倒装语序的区别，上下文逻辑的一致，固定搭配的用法以及其他的一些语法现象。
　　在本篇作文中，学生拥有不错的整体思维。采用了总分总的逻辑模式，层次分明，段落清晰。但是在具体的应用中，我们可以看出，该生的弱点在于词性的掌握上，不管名词，动词，形容词，只要词义与所需要的词汇相关，就会像使用汉语一样硬拼凑在一起。再者，高中阶段的书面表达要求是100字左右，学生的习作应该在120字左右。最后该生在分析内容时，欠缺一些具体的论据支持，应该加以补充，使行文丰满流畅。
　　What is the most important thing in the world？ I think it is health. Without health， what should we do？
　　Here， I want to share some of my experience. Firstly， we should eat healthy food， such as vegetables， and fruit. With theses food， we can have enough energy and even develop a slim body. Secondly， we should have enough sleep； in other words， at least eight hours of sleep should be ensured each day so that we can concentrate more on our study in school. Finally， we should do exercise regularly， because life depends on exercise.
　　I think it is necessary to keep healthy for all of us， then we all can enjoy every day and live a happy life.