隶书节录老子《道德经》条幅李硕(江苏):优点:此件作品似取法《张迁碑》多一些,总体上用笔沉稳,结体开合有度,如“有力”、“者”等字有较浓厚的该碑特征。不足:一是笔法上入帖不深。如首字“知”的第一笔即不是隶书笔法,再如“人”、“者”的磔法也不到位。二是结体须仔细推敲。如“人”、“者”、“胜”、“富”等字。三是从落款看,行书还待加强学习。 Li Shuo (Jiangsu): Advantages: This piece of works seems to take the method of “Zhang Qian monument” more, with a pen steady, the degree of opening and closing knot, such as “strong ”“ ”And other words have a stronger feature of the monument. Shortcomings: First, the script is not deep into the posts. Such as the first word “know ” the first is not the official script, and then “person ”, “person ” method is not in place. Second, the body should be carefully scrutinized. Such as “person ”, “person ”, “wins ”, “rich ” and other words. Third, from the inscriptions, the line still need to strengthen learning.