失误诊断本文写自己对父母的愧疚之,情却从对一家小店的印象写,起构思算得上巧。妙描写小店的那一男一,女主要抓住的是人物“笑呵”呵的生活情,景切入也算细。小遗憾的,是原本充满情感的内,容读来却毫无生,趣更谈不上情感动人。了究其失,误主要表现在两方。面一是细节刻画不够深。 Fault diagnosis This article write your parents guilty, but from the impression of a small shop to write, since the idea of ​​calculating clever. Wonderful description of the shop that a man, the female main seize the characters “laughter ” Oh life, cut into the scene is also considered fine. Small regret, is originally full of emotion, content to read but no life, not to mention the fun of emotion. Investigate the loss, mistakes mainly in the two sides. First, the details of the painting is not deep enough.