2014年第3期《应用写作》刊登了《从语言到功能——评改一篇批评性通报》一文。该文以一篇存在多处错误的批评性通报为例,从语言表述到功能内涵逐层分析并加以修改,这种评改确能给读者以启发和借鉴。但笔者研读后认为,修改后的“通报”仍有不足之处。以下按修改后通报的结构顺序,从内容到形式再作评析与修改。[原文中修改后的通报]育才中学教务处关于处罚王×同学考试作弊的通报① Issue 3, 2014 “Applied Writing” featured an article entitled “From Language to Function - Reviewing a Critical Bulletin.” Taking a critical communication with many mistakes as an example, this article analyzes and modifies the linguistic expressions to the functional connotations layer by layer, which can really inspire the readers. However, after I studied it, I think the revised “notification” still has some shortcomings. Following the revised notice of the order of structure, from the content to the form and then make comments and changes. [Original in the revised notification] Yucai High School Office of punishment on the punishment × × students cheating the examination ①