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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱： zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
本期点评名师
姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》、《英语周报》特约编辑、《中学生英语》兼职编委。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》、《初中英语新作文》、《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册，辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
An Embarrassing Morning
I had a bad morning. First of all， I was late for school. My head teacher Mr. Li was very angry with me. The second class was math. The teacher asked me to hand out① my homework when I realized that I had forgotten② it in my bedroom. I had to say sorry to my math teacher. After class， Mr. Li asked me to go to his office. When I went into the office， I was nearly knocked down by another teacher whom③ was in a hurry. I was very embarrassed. Mr. Li was angry with me because④ my carelessness. I felt very sorry.
What an embarrassing morning！
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校九（2）班 惠琳
1. 优点：
小作者描写了自己经历的尴尬的早上，用词准确，表达生动，语意连贯，而且能熟练运用复杂的句式如定语从句等。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① hand out 改为hand in。hand out意为“分发”；表示“上交”应用hand in。
② forgotten改为left。forget 表示忘记了某事物或忘了要做的事；leave 表示把某物遗忘在某地了。
③whom 改为who。关系代词在定语从句中作主语，应用who，而不能用whom。
④because改为because of。because表示“因为”时只用作连词，引导原因状语从句；because of意为“因为”，相当于一个介词，后接名词、动名词或代词构成表示原因的短语。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。
出生日期：2001年11月12日
爱好：唱歌
座右铭：自信是成功的第一秘诀。
就读学校：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学初三（5）班
指导老师：王桂馨
My Favourite Film Star
My favourite film star is Kim Soo Hyun. He is famous all over the world.
Kim Soo Hyun was born on 16 February， 1988. He was born in Seoul， South Korea. In 2007， he started acting. He is tall and handsome. He is an experienced actor and he is good at singing and dancing.
Since his first scene play The Pickled Cheese Smile， Kim Soo Hyun has acted in many successful films and dramas， including Dream High in 2011， Secretly Greatly in 2013， My Love from the Star in 2013. He won several international awards such as the Award for Best New Actor at the Korean Grand Bell Awards in 2013. He also won an Award for Best Actor from the Seoul International Film Festival in 2014.
Kim Soo Hyun is considered by many people as a superstar. I believe his acting skills will be even better in the future.An English Corner
Our class wants to hold an English Corner. I made a survey to see how my classmates think about it. Most of them think it is a good idea， but 30% of them don’t.
Some think the English Corner can make their school life more colorful. They can also learn something new. What’s more， they can practise their oral English there. But others don’t think so. They say they have too much homework to do. They have little time for the English Corner. Some of them are not good at expressing their own ideas in English， so they don’t want to speak English at all.
In my opinion， we should have such an English Corner. If we are not good at speaking English， we should practise more.
出生日期：2000年11月12日
爱好：唱歌
座右铭：自信是成功的第一秘诀。
就读学校：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学初三（5）班
指导老师：王桂馨
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
投稿邮箱： zxsyy2007@163.com或whzxsyy@163.com
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
本期点评名师
姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习研究会会员，《学英语》、《英语周报》特约编辑、《中学生英语》兼职编委。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》、《英语奥林匹克》、《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》、《初中英语题典大全》、《21世纪英语学习指南》、《初中英语新作文》、《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册，辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
An Embarrassing Morning
I had a bad morning. First of all， I was late for school. My head teacher Mr. Li was very angry with me. The second class was math. The teacher asked me to hand out① my homework when I realized that I had forgotten② it in my bedroom. I had to say sorry to my math teacher. After class， Mr. Li asked me to go to his office. When I went into the office， I was nearly knocked down by another teacher whom③ was in a hurry. I was very embarrassed. Mr. Li was angry with me because④ my carelessness. I felt very sorry.
What an embarrassing morning！
安徽省濉溪县四铺中心学校九（2）班 惠琳
1. 优点：
小作者描写了自己经历的尴尬的早上，用词准确，表达生动，语意连贯，而且能熟练运用复杂的句式如定语从句等。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① hand out 改为hand in。hand out意为“分发”；表示“上交”应用hand in。
② forgotten改为left。forget 表示忘记了某事物或忘了要做的事；leave 表示把某物遗忘在某地了。
③whom 改为who。关系代词在定语从句中作主语，应用who，而不能用whom。
④because改为because of。because表示“因为”时只用作连词，引导原因状语从句；because of意为“因为”，相当于一个介词，后接名词、动名词或代词构成表示原因的短语。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分20分的标准，本文修改前可得18分。
出生日期：2001年11月12日
爱好：唱歌
座右铭：自信是成功的第一秘诀。
就读学校：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学初三（5）班
指导老师：王桂馨
My Favourite Film Star
My favourite film star is Kim Soo Hyun. He is famous all over the world.
Kim Soo Hyun was born on 16 February， 1988. He was born in Seoul， South Korea. In 2007， he started acting. He is tall and handsome. He is an experienced actor and he is good at singing and dancing.
Since his first scene play The Pickled Cheese Smile， Kim Soo Hyun has acted in many successful films and dramas， including Dream High in 2011， Secretly Greatly in 2013， My Love from the Star in 2013. He won several international awards such as the Award for Best New Actor at the Korean Grand Bell Awards in 2013. He also won an Award for Best Actor from the Seoul International Film Festival in 2014.
Kim Soo Hyun is considered by many people as a superstar. I believe his acting skills will be even better in the future.An English Corner
Our class wants to hold an English Corner. I made a survey to see how my classmates think about it. Most of them think it is a good idea， but 30% of them don’t.
Some think the English Corner can make their school life more colorful. They can also learn something new. What’s more， they can practise their oral English there. But others don’t think so. They say they have too much homework to do. They have little time for the English Corner. Some of them are not good at expressing their own ideas in English， so they don’t want to speak English at all.
In my opinion， we should have such an English Corner. If we are not good at speaking English， we should practise more.
出生日期：2000年11月12日
爱好：唱歌
座右铭：自信是成功的第一秘诀。
就读学校：江苏省连云港市罗阳中学初三（5）班
指导老师：王桂馨