选取蜗牛“一步一个脚印”的属性喻邓亚萍“成功的经历”,十分契合。此文是变格为2006年高考浙江卷话题作文“生有所息／生无所息”的极好习作。此文还需要升格:将第一个议论句“好一只奋斗的‘蜗牛’”改为“好一只成功的‘蜗牛’”,在此句之前增写“取得三项学位”——作为全文的“果”;后面两个议论句,引出两个“因”。 Selecting the snail’s “step by step” property Yu Dengping’s “successful experience” fits well. This article is an excellent exercise to change the topic of the 2006 Zhejiang issue of the college entrance examination. This article also needs to be upgraded: The first argument, “a good ’snail’, is changed to ”a successful ’snail,“” before this sentence, adding “to obtain three degrees” - as The “results” of the full text; the following two argumentative sentences lead to two “causes.”