【考场作文】温暖的表情顾家宁回眸记忆,最深处的是那个最温暖的笑意。那是生死斩不断的羁绊,是时间冲不淡的痕迹。那抹笑意,那抹温暖,亘古不变。(语言优美,扣住文题,但“表情”二字没有出现。)转动时间的轮盘,回到多年以前。那时候的我,很小很小,与奶奶一起生活。那时,(“那时”与前句“那时候”重复。)我才刚学会蹒跚行走,走路摇摇晃晃,似乎风一吹便会栽倒在地。(比喻不恰当。)我一摇一摆地走着,突然被石子一绊,“啪”的一下跌倒在地,相伴的还有我嘹 [Test room composition] warm facial expression Gu Ning look back memories, the deepest is that the most warm smile. That is the fetters of life and death cut off, is not the time Chongbu traces. That wipe smile, then wipe warm, unchanged from time immemorial. (Beautiful language, withstood the article, but “expression ” word does not appear.) Turn the wheel of time, back to many years ago. At that time, I was very young and lived with my grandmother. At that time, (“” then “is repeated with the preceding sentence” “at that time.”) I just learned to hobble and walk unsteadily, as if the wind blows to the ground. (Analogy is not appropriate.) I walked swinging, suddenly tripped by stones, “” snap "fall to the ground, accompanied by me 嘹