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1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
本 期 点 评 名 师
于莹 1992年毕业于山东师范大学，中学高级教师，山东省梁山县优秀教师，获市级优质课一等奖，一直从事初中英语的教学工作，连续多年在中考中取得优异成绩。2012年12月在山东省英语竞赛中荣获优秀指导教师称号。先后在《中学生英语》、《山东教育导报》、《现代中学生》、《初中生英语学习》、《英语辅导报》、《英语周报》、《学生导报》、《新课堂》等国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文三十多篇。
I Want to Be a Teacher
“You want to be a teacher？ Don’t be silly. Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.” My friend was puzzling① when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future. I’m not silly and I’ll tell you my reasons.
I’m determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child. They are kind and respectable， like angels. They are learned， helpful and encouraging. I’m determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for② success. I’m determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn， change and grow up with my students. I’m determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers—simple but free. The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing， doing research work and anything I like.
I’ll try my best to be an ideal teacher. Firstly， I’ll study hardly③ to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills. Secondly， I’ll love my students and take proud④ in my profession. Thirdly， I’ll trust in them， respect them and understand them.
I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world. I’ll take it as my lifelong career. I will never regret my decision. I think my wish will come true. Do you think so？
山东省梁山县杨营一中初二 高成浩
1. 优点：
本文以反意设问句开头，突出了主题。本文层次清晰，语言得当，衔接紧凑，说服力强，是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① puzzling改为puzzled。修饰人时用puzzled，表示“感到疑惑的”；
② for改为to。lead to，固定搭配，表示“引起；导致；通向”；
③ hardly改为hard。hard意为“努力地”，hardly意为“几乎不”；
④ proud改为pride。take pride in等同于be proud of，意为“以……自豪”。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。
1. 将学生习作根据中考分值给出成绩； 2. 在应该修改的地方划线并标注序号；
3. 根据所标序号进行修改并说明修改的理由； 4. 给学生习作点评<优点与不足>；
5. 请点评名师提供简历一份，包括：学校、职务、 职称、荣誉、教研教学成果、照片一张。
来稿请寄： 430079 华中师范大学外国语学院《中学生英语》 杂志社 收
本 期 点 评 名 师
于莹 1992年毕业于山东师范大学，中学高级教师，山东省梁山县优秀教师，获市级优质课一等奖，一直从事初中英语的教学工作，连续多年在中考中取得优异成绩。2012年12月在山东省英语竞赛中荣获优秀指导教师称号。先后在《中学生英语》、《山东教育导报》、《现代中学生》、《初中生英语学习》、《英语辅导报》、《英语周报》、《学生导报》、《新课堂》等国家级、省级报刊上发表教学论文三十多篇。
I Want to Be a Teacher
“You want to be a teacher？ Don’t be silly. Teachers are poorly paid and they have no power.” My friend was puzzling① when I told her I wanted to be a teacher in the future. I’m not silly and I’ll tell you my reasons.
I’m determined to be a teacher because I have admired teachers very much since I was a little child. They are kind and respectable， like angels. They are learned， helpful and encouraging. I’m determined to be a teacher because teachers can lead us for② success. I’m determined to be a teacher because I can keep young and I can learn， change and grow up with my students. I’m determined to be a teacher because I like the style of teachers—simple but free. The vacations will offer me an opportunity for writing， doing research work and anything I like.
I’ll try my best to be an ideal teacher. Firstly， I’ll study hardly③ to increase my knowledge and learn teaching skills. Secondly， I’ll love my students and take proud④ in my profession. Thirdly， I’ll trust in them， respect them and understand them.
I believe that teaching is the most honorable job in the world. I’ll take it as my lifelong career. I will never regret my decision. I think my wish will come true. Do you think so？
山东省梁山县杨营一中初二 高成浩
1. 优点：
本文以反意设问句开头，突出了主题。本文层次清晰，语言得当，衔接紧凑，说服力强，是一篇值得推荐的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
① puzzling改为puzzled。修饰人时用puzzled，表示“感到疑惑的”；
② for改为to。lead to，固定搭配，表示“引起；导致；通向”；
③ hardly改为hard。hard意为“努力地”，hardly意为“几乎不”；
④ proud改为pride。take pride in等同于be proud of，意为“以……自豪”。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。