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必修一第三单元的写作是Personal recount: email，也就是电子邮件的写作。怎样写电子邮件？下面我们通过例题说明。
例题假设你是李华，你准备用英语写一封电子邮件给你的朋友John，告诉他你的一次旅游经历。词数120左右。
分析电子邮件有它固定的格式和具体要求：
1. 电子邮件的基本格式。必须在标题（Heading）栏的“收件人（To）”框中输入收信人的e-mail 地址。“主题（Subject）”框的内容应简明地概括信的内容，短的可以是一个单词，如greetings；长的可以是一个名词性短语或是完整句，但长度一般不超过35个字母。“主题”框的内容切忌含糊不清。如News about the meeting 这样的表达，应具体到Tomorrow’s meeting canceled。视信的内容是否重要，还可以开头加上URGENT或者FYI（For Your Information，供参考），如：URGENT（Submit your report today）!
2. 确定体裁。电子邮件属于书信类作文，它要求信的开始要写称谓，如Dear Sir，接着才是正文部分。如本文是主动写电子邮件给别人，首先就要表明你的意图，如I’m writing to you concerning ... 正文最后还要写上感谢收信人的礼貌用语，如Thanks/Best wishes/I’m looking forward to hearing from you, 其次是结束语如Yours Truly/Sincerely，最后是签名，附上你的名字。
3. 确定时态、人称及写作特点。此类作文一般用第一人称。讲述过去的事情用一般过去时，表达现在的心情和愿望用一般现在时，这要根据具体的情况来定。书信体裁的语言要尽量使用日常交际用语，给人真实可信的感受，避免使用华丽的辞藻和夸张的写作手法。
因而，我们要细读写作要求，构思写作提纲。其结构一般为：
第一段：写信的原因；第二段：旅游所见；第三段：旅游感想。
然后在已确定的词汇的基础上连词成句，完成初级表达。
下面是两则学生习作，请仔细阅读。
A喻少杰
Dear John,
As we all know, there are many wonderful places in China and most of them are with great histories.
Last month, I went to Xi’an with my friends. Xi’an has a long history. It’s the capital of many dynasties and there are also many beautiful attractions. We went to Xi’an Terracotta Warriors. It was built in Qing dynasty and known as 5A grade scenic spot. It’s made up of three pit finished product glyph, a total area of 22780 square meters. There are 7400 various ceramic and arms in it. I really appreciate the wisdom of ancient people.
I’m tired, but I enjoy every minute of my trip. Now, I have known gradually that nothing is impossible, whatever big problem, if we think we can, we just can.
Yours truly，
Lihua
B黄良锦
Dear John,
I’m very glad to tell you that I had a wonderful trip. I went to the beautiful city Xi’an. Xi’an is a city which has very long and colorful history. In ancient China, it was the capital of 13 dynasties.
On the first day, we visited the Terracotta Warriors and Horses. It was made up of three vaults. Every vault had many soldiers and horses. It has an area of 22780 square meters. On the second day, we went to the Big Wild Goose Pagoda. It was an old building. If you go to the top of the tower, you can see the whole city.
It was all about my trip. I had a very good vacation. I’ve learned much useful information about Chinese history. If you have time, you can go to Xi’an.
Best wishes,
Yours，
Lihua
点评以上两篇习作基本上完成了要求。
第一段：相比较而言，B篇习作更加准确地把握住了书信开头的表达，使用了I’m very glad to ... 的句式来引领写信的目的。值得肯定的是，这两个同学在第一段都很好地使用了一个定语从句，给文章增色不少。
第二段：相比较而言，B篇习作层次更加分明一些，最后一句恰到好处地使用了一个复合句。A篇习作第二段句式结构不够丰富，显得有些单调。例如第二段第一句和第二句可以用一个复合句I, as well as my friends, went to Xi’an which has a long history来表达；第二句可用一个定语从句来表达，It used to be the capital of many dynasties where there are many places of interest.
结尾：比较而言，A篇习作的第一句I’m tired, but I enjoy every minute of my trip.用得很恰当，不过B篇习作的最后一句If you have time, you can go to Xi’an. 更加准确地把握住了此类作文结尾的表达，显得礼貌得体。
现将两篇习作稍加修改，作范文如下：
Dear John，
I’m very glad to tell you that I, as well as my friends, had a wonderful two-day trip to Xi’an which has a long and colorful history. It used to be the capital of thirteen Chinese dynasties where there are many places of interest.
On the first day, we paid a visit to the Emperor Qing’s Terracotta Warriors and Horses which is made up of three vaults and covers a total area of 22780 square meters. There, we found them well preserved in three modern constructions, each with an arched dome and a corridor along the side of the vault so that visitors may overlook the restored figures of warriors, horses and chariots in their original formations. On the second day, we went to the Big Wild Goose Pagoda, from whose top, we can have a bird’s eyeview of the whole city. What a spectacular sight!
Tired as I am, I enjoy every minute of my trip. I’ve learned much useful information about Chinese history. If it is convenient to you, you can go to Xi’an, too.
Best wishes!
Yours truly，
Lihua
例题假设你是李华，你准备用英语写一封电子邮件给你的朋友John，告诉他你的一次旅游经历。词数120左右。
分析电子邮件有它固定的格式和具体要求：
1. 电子邮件的基本格式。必须在标题（Heading）栏的“收件人（To）”框中输入收信人的e-mail 地址。“主题（Subject）”框的内容应简明地概括信的内容，短的可以是一个单词，如greetings；长的可以是一个名词性短语或是完整句，但长度一般不超过35个字母。“主题”框的内容切忌含糊不清。如News about the meeting 这样的表达，应具体到Tomorrow’s meeting canceled。视信的内容是否重要，还可以开头加上URGENT或者FYI（For Your Information，供参考），如：URGENT（Submit your report today）!
2. 确定体裁。电子邮件属于书信类作文，它要求信的开始要写称谓，如Dear Sir，接着才是正文部分。如本文是主动写电子邮件给别人，首先就要表明你的意图，如I’m writing to you concerning ... 正文最后还要写上感谢收信人的礼貌用语，如Thanks/Best wishes/I’m looking forward to hearing from you, 其次是结束语如Yours Truly/Sincerely，最后是签名，附上你的名字。
3. 确定时态、人称及写作特点。此类作文一般用第一人称。讲述过去的事情用一般过去时，表达现在的心情和愿望用一般现在时，这要根据具体的情况来定。书信体裁的语言要尽量使用日常交际用语，给人真实可信的感受，避免使用华丽的辞藻和夸张的写作手法。
因而，我们要细读写作要求，构思写作提纲。其结构一般为：
第一段：写信的原因；第二段：旅游所见；第三段：旅游感想。
然后在已确定的词汇的基础上连词成句，完成初级表达。
下面是两则学生习作，请仔细阅读。
A喻少杰
Dear John,
As we all know, there are many wonderful places in China and most of them are with great histories.
Last month, I went to Xi’an with my friends. Xi’an has a long history. It’s the capital of many dynasties and there are also many beautiful attractions. We went to Xi’an Terracotta Warriors. It was built in Qing dynasty and known as 5A grade scenic spot. It’s made up of three pit finished product glyph, a total area of 22780 square meters. There are 7400 various ceramic and arms in it. I really appreciate the wisdom of ancient people.
I’m tired, but I enjoy every minute of my trip. Now, I have known gradually that nothing is impossible, whatever big problem, if we think we can, we just can.
Yours truly，
Lihua
B黄良锦
Dear John,
I’m very glad to tell you that I had a wonderful trip. I went to the beautiful city Xi’an. Xi’an is a city which has very long and colorful history. In ancient China, it was the capital of 13 dynasties.
On the first day, we visited the Terracotta Warriors and Horses. It was made up of three vaults. Every vault had many soldiers and horses. It has an area of 22780 square meters. On the second day, we went to the Big Wild Goose Pagoda. It was an old building. If you go to the top of the tower, you can see the whole city.
It was all about my trip. I had a very good vacation. I’ve learned much useful information about Chinese history. If you have time, you can go to Xi’an.
Best wishes,
Yours，
Lihua
点评以上两篇习作基本上完成了要求。
第一段：相比较而言，B篇习作更加准确地把握住了书信开头的表达，使用了I’m very glad to ... 的句式来引领写信的目的。值得肯定的是，这两个同学在第一段都很好地使用了一个定语从句，给文章增色不少。
第二段：相比较而言，B篇习作层次更加分明一些，最后一句恰到好处地使用了一个复合句。A篇习作第二段句式结构不够丰富，显得有些单调。例如第二段第一句和第二句可以用一个复合句I, as well as my friends, went to Xi’an which has a long history来表达；第二句可用一个定语从句来表达，It used to be the capital of many dynasties where there are many places of interest.
结尾：比较而言，A篇习作的第一句I’m tired, but I enjoy every minute of my trip.用得很恰当，不过B篇习作的最后一句If you have time, you can go to Xi’an. 更加准确地把握住了此类作文结尾的表达，显得礼貌得体。
现将两篇习作稍加修改，作范文如下：
Dear John，
I’m very glad to tell you that I, as well as my friends, had a wonderful two-day trip to Xi’an which has a long and colorful history. It used to be the capital of thirteen Chinese dynasties where there are many places of interest.
On the first day, we paid a visit to the Emperor Qing’s Terracotta Warriors and Horses which is made up of three vaults and covers a total area of 22780 square meters. There, we found them well preserved in three modern constructions, each with an arched dome and a corridor along the side of the vault so that visitors may overlook the restored figures of warriors, horses and chariots in their original formations. On the second day, we went to the Big Wild Goose Pagoda, from whose top, we can have a bird’s eyeview of the whole city. What a spectacular sight!
Tired as I am, I enjoy every minute of my trip. I’ve learned much useful information about Chinese history. If it is convenient to you, you can go to Xi’an, too.
Best wishes!
Yours truly，
Lihua