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【写作任务】
假定你是王海,你的美国朋友Peter通过email和你讨论有关个人理想问题，询问你下列形象中你最希望成为哪一种，为什么？请根据下列要点用英语写一篇100词左右的回信，可根据所给信息作适当发挥，开头和结尾以为你写好：
1. 对该形象的简单介绍。2.喜欢该形象的理由。3.从该形象身上得到的启示。
注意：1.字数：120词左右。
2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
3.参考词汇：dignified 威严的； sharp-witted机警的；rigorous严谨的
Dear Peter,
Your email on October 28th is now in my reception.__________________________
______________.
Best wishes
YoursWanghai
【写作指导】
1.词语搜索：
ideal; wish; dream; future; idol; expectation; popular; active; fashionable; energetic; cool; colorful; beautiful; various; realize/live one’s dream; be popular with/among; stage; audience; happiness; fashion; culture; devote… to; development;
2.句型搜索:
share with sb sth(与某人分享……);so +v + s(……也如此); be born of(天生……);have been doing(一直……);make + O + OC(使……)
3.单句表达：
(1). I’d like to share with you my expectations of my future.
(2). You know, everyone has his ideal as a student and all try to live their dreams. So do I.
(3). Born of a singer, I want to become a pop star.
(4). Active and fashionable they are popular among the audience. Energetic and cool they are in our life.
(5). Therefore, I have been dreaming to be a pop star, who will make our life colorful using my beautiful voice.
(6). Of course, I also hope that I’ll be able to sing around the world on various stages to various people, changing of words in the lighting of hearts.
(7). Would you be so kind to give me your advice.
4.学生习作
Dear Peter,
Your email on October 28th is now in my reception.I’d like to discuss my expectations of my future with you.
I like pop songs and I want to be a pop star as they ①bring people happiness with their songs. Like many youngsters in my age, I have my own idol. I wish that I will ②lead the fashion and devote myself to the development of culture. And I also hope that I’ll be able to sing around the world on various stages to various people to bring them calmness, courage, expectations and inspirations.________③
Best wishes.
Yours Waihai
5.名师点评
本文要点齐全，层次分明，结构合理，上下连贯；能用自己所学勾画出自己对未来的设想。写作过程中使用了定语从句，被动语态等，加之一些过渡词的使用，显示了作者的基本功。但也出现了少许错误。
(1).错误更正：
①处句子中主语应改为the pop star，they在此指代不明。
②处句子中will改为would，wish后的宾语从句应用虚拟语气。
(2).锦上添花：
③处如加上Would you be so kind to give me your advice.则显得合理，客气。符合书信中对讨论内容的探讨，体现了书信内容的完整性。
整体得分：23分。
6.范文欣赏:
Dear Peter,
Your email on October 28th is now in my reception. I’d like to share with you my expectations of my future.
You know, everyone has his ideal as a student and all try to live their dreams. So do I. Born of a singer, I want to become a pop star. Active and fashionable they are popular among the audience. Energetic and cool they are in our life. They bring us beauty and happiness with their songs. Therefore, I have been dreaming to be a pop star, who will make our life colorful using my beautiful voice. Of course, I also hope that I’ll be able to sing around the world on various stages to various people, changing of words in the lighting of hearts. Would you be so kind to give me your advice.
Best wishes.
Yours Waihai
（陕西省洋县城关中学）
假定你是王海,你的美国朋友Peter通过email和你讨论有关个人理想问题，询问你下列形象中你最希望成为哪一种，为什么？请根据下列要点用英语写一篇100词左右的回信，可根据所给信息作适当发挥，开头和结尾以为你写好：
1. 对该形象的简单介绍。2.喜欢该形象的理由。3.从该形象身上得到的启示。
注意：1.字数：120词左右。
2.可适当增加细节，使行文连贯。
3.参考词汇：dignified 威严的； sharp-witted机警的；rigorous严谨的
Dear Peter,
Your email on October 28th is now in my reception.__________________________
______________.
Best wishes
YoursWanghai
【写作指导】
1.词语搜索：
ideal; wish; dream; future; idol; expectation; popular; active; fashionable; energetic; cool; colorful; beautiful; various; realize/live one’s dream; be popular with/among; stage; audience; happiness; fashion; culture; devote… to; development;
2.句型搜索:
share with sb sth(与某人分享……);so +v + s(……也如此); be born of(天生……);have been doing(一直……);make + O + OC(使……)
3.单句表达：
(1). I’d like to share with you my expectations of my future.
(2). You know, everyone has his ideal as a student and all try to live their dreams. So do I.
(3). Born of a singer, I want to become a pop star.
(4). Active and fashionable they are popular among the audience. Energetic and cool they are in our life.
(5). Therefore, I have been dreaming to be a pop star, who will make our life colorful using my beautiful voice.
(6). Of course, I also hope that I’ll be able to sing around the world on various stages to various people, changing of words in the lighting of hearts.
(7). Would you be so kind to give me your advice.
4.学生习作
Dear Peter,
Your email on October 28th is now in my reception.I’d like to discuss my expectations of my future with you.
I like pop songs and I want to be a pop star as they ①bring people happiness with their songs. Like many youngsters in my age, I have my own idol. I wish that I will ②lead the fashion and devote myself to the development of culture. And I also hope that I’ll be able to sing around the world on various stages to various people to bring them calmness, courage, expectations and inspirations.________③
Best wishes.
Yours Waihai
5.名师点评
本文要点齐全，层次分明，结构合理，上下连贯；能用自己所学勾画出自己对未来的设想。写作过程中使用了定语从句，被动语态等，加之一些过渡词的使用，显示了作者的基本功。但也出现了少许错误。
(1).错误更正：
①处句子中主语应改为the pop star，they在此指代不明。
②处句子中will改为would，wish后的宾语从句应用虚拟语气。
(2).锦上添花：
③处如加上Would you be so kind to give me your advice.则显得合理，客气。符合书信中对讨论内容的探讨，体现了书信内容的完整性。
整体得分：23分。
6.范文欣赏:
Dear Peter,
Your email on October 28th is now in my reception. I’d like to share with you my expectations of my future.
You know, everyone has his ideal as a student and all try to live their dreams. So do I. Born of a singer, I want to become a pop star. Active and fashionable they are popular among the audience. Energetic and cool they are in our life. They bring us beauty and happiness with their songs. Therefore, I have been dreaming to be a pop star, who will make our life colorful using my beautiful voice. Of course, I also hope that I’ll be able to sing around the world on various stages to various people, changing of words in the lighting of hearts. Would you be so kind to give me your advice.
Best wishes.
Yours Waihai
（陕西省洋县城关中学）