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变格前作文以头发之“轻”承载亲情之重,很有特点。全文用“头发”组织材料,跌宕起伏。“忽然看见一个‘男人’在照镜子’——意料之外,情理之中——出彩之笔!变格后作文为凸显变格后的主旨,其变格的方法还有:①变换“要钱”的背景。变格前是“我要买词典”,变格后是“任课老师要我买复习资料。②变换“我”对妈妈剪去长发的“感受”。变格前“我欣慰”,变格后“我心渗血”。③改变了标题。“头发伤痕”,无理而妙,发人深省。④卒章“豹尾”,入木三分。“下星期,交15块钱”一笔,将变格后作文的主旨向纵深开掘。
Before the transition, the essay focuses on the “lightness” of the hair to bear the weight of affection, which is very characteristic. The full text used “hair” tissue material, ups and downs. “Suddenly saw a ’men’ looking in the mirror’ - unexpectedly, reasonable - a colorful pen! After changing the composition to highlight the main purpose of the change after the grid, the method of change is: 1 The background of money. Before the change was ”I want to buy a dictionary“, after the change is ”The teacher in the class asked me to buy review materials. 2 Transform the “feeling” of “I” to mother to cut long hair. Before the transition, “I was relieved.” After the change, “I bleed through my heart.” 3 changed the title. “Hair scars” are unreasonable and suggestive. 4 strokes “Leopard tail”, into the wood three points. “I will pay 15 dollars next week” to dig deep into the main theme of the composition after the change.