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My favorite Chinese traditional festival is the Spring Festival.
On New Year’s Eve, I usually have dinner with my relatives. The food is very delicious and they carry people’s wishes with families. And at 12:00 p.m. everyone will go out to light fireworks. On New year’s Day, we always get up early and have dumplings for breakfast. Grandparents often put something special in dumplings to carry wishes. And then, everyone will meet relatives and give best wishes to each other by saying things such as“Happy New Year!”
What about you?
朱志兰点评：这是一篇有关中国传统节日的话题作文，选材立意符合中考要求。作者从时间和活动两个方面讲述这个节日的特点，但是在点题上没有突出“favorite”一词，所以老师在文章后面补充了收红包这一细节，呼应一下主题“最喜爱的节日”。人称上应该统一用第一人称复数we会更符合逻辑。
范文：
My favorite Chinese festival is the Spring Festival. It’s also known as Chinese New Year.
Before the festival, all the families will clean the house. On New Year’s Eve, we usually have dinner with our relatives. And at 12:00 p.m. everyone will go out to light fireworks.
On New year’s Day, we always get up early and have dumplings for breakfast. Grandparents often put something special like coins in dumplings. And then, everyone will meet relatives and give best wishes to each other such as “Happy New Year!” At that time, children are the happiest because we can get many red packets from our relatives.
What’s your favorite festival?
On New Year’s Eve, I usually have dinner with my relatives. The food is very delicious and they carry people’s wishes with families. And at 12:00 p.m. everyone will go out to light fireworks. On New year’s Day, we always get up early and have dumplings for breakfast. Grandparents often put something special in dumplings to carry wishes. And then, everyone will meet relatives and give best wishes to each other by saying things such as“Happy New Year!”
What about you?
朱志兰点评：这是一篇有关中国传统节日的话题作文，选材立意符合中考要求。作者从时间和活动两个方面讲述这个节日的特点，但是在点题上没有突出“favorite”一词，所以老师在文章后面补充了收红包这一细节，呼应一下主题“最喜爱的节日”。人称上应该统一用第一人称复数we会更符合逻辑。
范文：
My favorite Chinese festival is the Spring Festival. It’s also known as Chinese New Year.
Before the festival, all the families will clean the house. On New Year’s Eve, we usually have dinner with our relatives. And at 12:00 p.m. everyone will go out to light fireworks.
On New year’s Day, we always get up early and have dumplings for breakfast. Grandparents often put something special like coins in dumplings. And then, everyone will meet relatives and give best wishes to each other such as “Happy New Year!” At that time, children are the happiest because we can get many red packets from our relatives.
What’s your favorite festival?