王玉丽同学: 你写的散文《槐树的风姿》,我读后有些想法,提出来供你写作时参考。你的文字比较流畅,散文的立意也好,想通过槐树歌颂那些在日常工作中默默无闻的人的高尚品质。全文分三小节,第一节写槐树“那么趣味无穷”,它留在了你童年的记忆里。第二节写槐树的用途,它与人们日常生活的关系。第三节写槐树的品质,“它给予人们的很多,很多。却从来没有索取什么。”以此比喻现实生活中具有这种品德的人。 Wang Yuli classmate: You wrote the essay “Grace of Ash Tree,” I read some ideas, put forward for your writing reference. Your writing is fluent, the essay’s conception Ye Hao, want to sing through Sophorae to those who work unknown in the routine of the noble quality. The full text is divided into three sections, the first section to write Ash tree “so fun”, it stays in your childhood memories. The second section describes the use of acacia tree, its relationship with people’s daily life. The third section describes the quality of acacia tree, “It gives people many, many, but never ask for anything.” In this way people in real life with such a character.