一位小学六年级女生送来她的作文《替妈妈想想》,请笔者点评与帮助修改。这篇作文表达了作者(我)的真情实感,而且是通过具体描述来表达这种情感的,因而真挚感人。美中不足的是,作者违背了“写文章要注意紧扣主题,行文要始终保持统一话题”的写作方法。该文所写的内容不 A sixth grade primary school girl sent her composition “for mom think,” please comment and help the author to modify. This essay expresses the true feelings of the author (I), and it is through the specific description to express this emotion, and therefore sincerely touching. The fly in the ointment is that the author violates the writing method of “writing an article to pay close attention to the theme closely and to always maintain a uniform topic of writing.” The content of the article is not written