教师示范“改作文”这个想法是由教师写下水作文想到的。教师写的下水作文给学生在构思、选材、表达等方面都提供了借鉴的范例,学生读后会受到很大的启迪。下水作文拓宽了他们写作的思路,提供了最适用的经验。但在学生习作后期,教师的作文批改能有多大程度的作用呢?笔者跟踪了一些学生的习作情况,发现许多曾经存在的问题,虽然笔者多次在批语中提醒,但后来的习作并没有改正;倒是那些在班上作为“范文”评讲的作文,其中一些写作优点,被学生有意无意地吸收了,在实际写作中运用不少。这就让我想到,教师的批语再精 Teacher demonstration “change the composition ” This idea is written by the teacher thought of water writing. Teachers wrote the sewer writing to the students in the conception, material selection, expression and other aspects provide a reference example, the students will be greatly enlightened. Launching essay broaden their thinking of writing, providing the most suitable experience. However, in the latter part of the students ’assignments, how much can the teacher’s essay be revised? The author traced some students’ assignments and found that many of the problems existed. Although the author reminded him many times in his remarks, the subsequent work was not corrected ; Instead, those in the class as “Pham Van ” commentary essay, some of which are written advantages, by students consciously or unconsciously absorbed, used in actual writing a lot. This reminds me of the teacher’s remarks refined