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【原文展示】我家住在公园里江苏省高淳县实验小学五(4)班徐可萱高淳又建了一个新公园,就在我家对面,它精致、漂亮、生机勃勃,我很喜欢它。公园是植物的天堂。走在石径上,两旁绿草如茵,小树在微风中向我点头问好。低头一看,哇!五颜六色的小花,有红的、紫的……在绿叶的衬托下,显得格外好看。旁批开头第一自然段要和文题紧密联系。可修改成:“我的家乡——高淳最近几年越变越美,一个个公园坐落在湖滨、小区、街道,犹如一颗颗明珠。我家对面就新建了一个湿地公园,它精致、生机勃勃、引人入胜。我家就直接住在公园里啦!”
[Original text] My family lives in a park Five (4) classes in Gaochun Experimental Primary School in Jiangsu Province Xu Ke Xuan Gaochun built a new park just across from my house. It is exquisite, beautiful and full of vitality. I really like it. The park is a paradise for plants. Walking on the stone path, lined with grass, the small tree nodded to say hello to me in the breeze. Looked down, wow! Colorful flowers, red, purple ... ... set off in the leaves, it is particularly beautiful. Next to the first batch of natural paragraphs to be closely linked with the topic. Can be amended as: “My hometown - Gaochun in recent years, the more beautiful the United States, one by one park is located in the lake, district, street, like a pearl .And across from my home is a new wetland park, it is exquisite, vibrant , Fascinating. My family lives in the park directly! ”