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姜经志 男,中学英语高级教师,省级骨干教师,淮北市优秀教师,中国外语学习学研究会会员,《学英语》《英语周报》特约编辑。多年来,在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇,并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》《英语奥林匹克》《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》;参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》《初中英语题典大全》《21世纪英语学习指南》《初中英语新作文》《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册;辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
Winter holiday is coming. How glad I am!I can do many things of my own. But watch TV① is my favorite in the holidays.
I like to watch TV, because I want to learn more about the country and the world. It always brings me new ideas. Of course, we can learn things better and more easily on② TV than over the radio or the newspaper because we can hear and watch at the same time on TV. Now many people like to watch TV③. TV becomes an important part in our every day④ life. By the way, eyes are important to us. Don’t keeping⑤ your eyes watching TV for a long time.
1. 優点:
整篇文章语言流畅、条理清晰,突出了“电视能开阔人们的眼界,我们可以从电视中轻松了解到许多知识”这一主题。文中的动词运用适当、合理。
2. 需要修改的地方:
①watch TV应改为watching TV。watching TV为动名词短语作主语。
②on应改为by。此处on改为by更能体现“通过”电视这一“动态”媒体。
③like to watch TV应改为like watching TV。like watching TV 更能说明一种惯常的行为。
④every day应改为everyday。every day是名词短语,意为“每天”,常用作时间状语;everyday是形容词,意为“每天的,日常的”,常用在名词前做定语。
⑤keeping应改为keep。祈使句的否定形式是在Don’t后面加动词原形。
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准,本文修改前可得21分。
Winter holiday is coming. How glad I am!I can do many things of my own. But watch TV① is my favorite in the holidays.
I like to watch TV, because I want to learn more about the country and the world. It always brings me new ideas. Of course, we can learn things better and more easily on② TV than over the radio or the newspaper because we can hear and watch at the same time on TV. Now many people like to watch TV③. TV becomes an important part in our every day④ life. By the way, eyes are important to us. Don’t keeping⑤ your eyes watching TV for a long time.
1. 優点:
整篇文章语言流畅、条理清晰,突出了“电视能开阔人们的眼界,我们可以从电视中轻松了解到许多知识”这一主题。文中的动词运用适当、合理。
2. 需要修改的地方:
①watch TV应改为watching TV。watching TV为动名词短语作主语。
②on应改为by。此处on改为by更能体现“通过”电视这一“动态”媒体。
③like to watch TV应改为like watching TV。like watching TV 更能说明一种惯常的行为。
④every day应改为everyday。every day是名词短语,意为“每天”,常用作时间状语;everyday是形容词,意为“每天的,日常的”,常用在名词前做定语。
⑤keeping应改为keep。祈使句的否定形式是在Don’t后面加动词原形。
3. 评分:
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准,本文修改前可得21分。