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假设你是正在上高中的李华,你的加拿大网友Jim在给你的来信中想了解中国高中生和大学生是怎样安排暑期的,请你以 “The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation”为题写一篇短文,将最近某英文报纸上刊登的下列信息告诉他,并简要谈谈你对此的看法。
注意:1. 根据思路图适当展开,以使行文连贯;2. 词数:120左右。
分析整合
(1) 写作思路
①全文围绕标题 “The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation”展开,根据英语提纲信息可知,高中生和大学生过暑假的方式存在较大差异,故应写出一个能有效覆盖此差异的主旨句,以体现语篇中段落的发展方向。② 在高中生和大学生如何度过暑假方面,信息中仅列举了相应的事实细节,故应根据已知信息抽象出各自段落的主题句。③ 最后一段谈自己就此问题的看法。
(2)信息要点
① 标题:The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation
② 语篇组织 (斜体部分为扩展信息):
段落1:
全文主旨段:There are great differences between how high school students and college students spend summer vacation.
段落2:(高中生过暑假的方式)根据信息 “stay at home”和“go to school”可知,高中生暑假主要是在室内度过,故该段主题句可以是:High school students spend most of their summer vacation indoors. 本段拓展句建立在短语“stay at home”和“go to school”上,可拓展为:The reason why some choose to stay at home is largely due to their parents, who are expecting their kids to devote as much time as possible to their school work. Despite the pressures of school assignments,they feel free and relaxed at home, chatting with their family,watching TV or visiting relatives. Others go back to school as usual for further improvement in study skills.
段落3:(大学生过暑假的方式)根据信息 “go travelling ”和“gain work experience”可知,大学生的暑假过得丰富多彩,所以该段的主题句可写为:College students enjoy a more interesting and meaningful summer vacation than do high school students. 本段拓展句建立在短语“go travelling”和“gain work experience”上,可拓展为:Some prefer to travel to places of interest sightseeing across the country,which offers them a high quality environment and an attractive place to stay,far from the problems of the big cities. More and more college students prefer to use their spare time to gain work experience in the places such as companies. This experience may help them to get better jobs after graduation.
段落4:根据文中提到的现象,表述清楚自己就此问题的看法。可以是:In my opinion though,as young teenagers,both high school students and college students should spend their summer vacation in a colorful way. They should not only continue their school work and enjoy themselves,but they should also make good preparations for the future.
(3)语篇整理
考生如果只是简单地罗列出上述要点,在遣词、句式和表达上不仅单调,而且也无法高质量完成写作任务。因此,有必要在上述基础上对每一个要点进行恰当的扩展,扩展部分在意义和逻辑上应与前后文一致。除此以外,英语段落有较强的段落特征,即一个段落往往是围绕一个特定话题展开,要有主题句以及支撑主题句发展的具体信息,必要时在段尾还有总结句。
The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation
There are great differences between how high school students and college students spend summer vacation①.
High school students spend most of their summer vacation indoors②. The reason why some choose to stay at home is largely due to their parents, who are expecting their kids to devote as much time as possible to their school work③. Despite the pressures of school assignments,they feel free and relaxed at home,chatting with their family,watching TV or visiting relatives④. Others go back to school as usual for further improvement in study skills.
However,college students enjoy a more interesting and meaningful summer vacation than do high school students⑤. Some prefer to travel to places of interest sightseeing across the country,which offers them a high quality environment and an attractive place to stay,far from the problems of the big cities⑥. More and more college students prefer to use their spare time to gain work experience in the places such as companies⑦. This experience may help them to get better jobs after graduation.
In my opinion though,as young teenagers,both high school students and college students should spend their summer vacation in a colorful way. They should not only continue their school work and enjoy themselves,but they should also make good preparations for the future⑧.
(4)技巧点拨
(1)全文语篇结构明晰,围绕话题 “The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation”展开,段落组织符合英语短文特点;句①为全文的主旨段,体现语篇的发展方向;句②及⑤为第二段和第三段的主题句,体现相应段落的发展顺序。
(2)全文遣词准确、句式丰富、表达连贯。例:以下词语的运用使得表达更为准确:due to, devote to,as much as possible,further improvement,a high quality environment, prefer, such as, in my opinion though(adv.),make good preparations for,etc. 句④使用despite引出的介词短语代替让步状语从句,句子显得更简洁,使用了现在分词短语“chatting with the family, watching TV or visiting relatives”作伴随状语,增强了句子表达的多样性;句⑤than后使用倒装,句子显得平衡;句③、句⑥运用了关系副词why和关系代词who以及关系代词which引出定语从句,丰富了表达效果;句⑦中使用比较级结构,起到承上启下作用;句⑧使用“not only…but also…”,不仅语意连贯清楚,同时句子显得更紧凑。
巩固运用
假设你是李华,你的英国朋友Peter来信向你询问如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写封回信。
要点:
1. 参加中文学习班;2. 看中文书刊、电视;3. 学唱中文歌曲; 4. 交中国朋友。
注意:1. 词数100左右;2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3. 开头语已为你写好。
Dear Peter,
I’m glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Best wishes!
信息整合
(1)“点”、“句”组织及拓展
参加中文学习班:take a Chinese course →
It is important to take a Chinese course, as you’ll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow classmates.
看中文书刊、电视:
watch TV and read books,newspapers and magazines in Chinese →
It helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.
学唱中文歌曲:learn and sing Chinese songs →
It should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs,because you’ll learn and remember Chinese words more easily by doing so.
交中国朋友:make Chinese friends →
You can also make more Chinese friends,who will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.
(2)语篇组织
Dear Peter,
I’m glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Here are a few suggestions. First,it is important to take a Chinese course,as you’ll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow classmates. Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.
Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because you’ll learn and remember Chinese words more easily by doing so. You can also make more Chinese friends,who will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.
Try and write me in Chinese next time.
Best wishes!Li Hua
编辑/梁宇清
注意:1. 根据思路图适当展开,以使行文连贯;2. 词数:120左右。
分析整合
(1) 写作思路
①全文围绕标题 “The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation”展开,根据英语提纲信息可知,高中生和大学生过暑假的方式存在较大差异,故应写出一个能有效覆盖此差异的主旨句,以体现语篇中段落的发展方向。② 在高中生和大学生如何度过暑假方面,信息中仅列举了相应的事实细节,故应根据已知信息抽象出各自段落的主题句。③ 最后一段谈自己就此问题的看法。
(2)信息要点
① 标题:The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation
② 语篇组织 (斜体部分为扩展信息):
段落1:
全文主旨段:There are great differences between how high school students and college students spend summer vacation.
段落2:(高中生过暑假的方式)根据信息 “stay at home”和“go to school”可知,高中生暑假主要是在室内度过,故该段主题句可以是:High school students spend most of their summer vacation indoors. 本段拓展句建立在短语“stay at home”和“go to school”上,可拓展为:The reason why some choose to stay at home is largely due to their parents, who are expecting their kids to devote as much time as possible to their school work. Despite the pressures of school assignments,they feel free and relaxed at home, chatting with their family,watching TV or visiting relatives. Others go back to school as usual for further improvement in study skills.
段落3:(大学生过暑假的方式)根据信息 “go travelling ”和“gain work experience”可知,大学生的暑假过得丰富多彩,所以该段的主题句可写为:College students enjoy a more interesting and meaningful summer vacation than do high school students. 本段拓展句建立在短语“go travelling”和“gain work experience”上,可拓展为:Some prefer to travel to places of interest sightseeing across the country,which offers them a high quality environment and an attractive place to stay,far from the problems of the big cities. More and more college students prefer to use their spare time to gain work experience in the places such as companies. This experience may help them to get better jobs after graduation.
段落4:根据文中提到的现象,表述清楚自己就此问题的看法。可以是:In my opinion though,as young teenagers,both high school students and college students should spend their summer vacation in a colorful way. They should not only continue their school work and enjoy themselves,but they should also make good preparations for the future.
(3)语篇整理
考生如果只是简单地罗列出上述要点,在遣词、句式和表达上不仅单调,而且也无法高质量完成写作任务。因此,有必要在上述基础上对每一个要点进行恰当的扩展,扩展部分在意义和逻辑上应与前后文一致。除此以外,英语段落有较强的段落特征,即一个段落往往是围绕一个特定话题展开,要有主题句以及支撑主题句发展的具体信息,必要时在段尾还有总结句。
The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation
There are great differences between how high school students and college students spend summer vacation①.
High school students spend most of their summer vacation indoors②. The reason why some choose to stay at home is largely due to their parents, who are expecting their kids to devote as much time as possible to their school work③. Despite the pressures of school assignments,they feel free and relaxed at home,chatting with their family,watching TV or visiting relatives④. Others go back to school as usual for further improvement in study skills.
However,college students enjoy a more interesting and meaningful summer vacation than do high school students⑤. Some prefer to travel to places of interest sightseeing across the country,which offers them a high quality environment and an attractive place to stay,far from the problems of the big cities⑥. More and more college students prefer to use their spare time to gain work experience in the places such as companies⑦. This experience may help them to get better jobs after graduation.
In my opinion though,as young teenagers,both high school students and college students should spend their summer vacation in a colorful way. They should not only continue their school work and enjoy themselves,but they should also make good preparations for the future⑧.
(4)技巧点拨
(1)全文语篇结构明晰,围绕话题 “The Ways in Which Students Spend Summer Vacation”展开,段落组织符合英语短文特点;句①为全文的主旨段,体现语篇的发展方向;句②及⑤为第二段和第三段的主题句,体现相应段落的发展顺序。
(2)全文遣词准确、句式丰富、表达连贯。例:以下词语的运用使得表达更为准确:due to, devote to,as much as possible,further improvement,a high quality environment, prefer, such as, in my opinion though(adv.),make good preparations for,etc. 句④使用despite引出的介词短语代替让步状语从句,句子显得更简洁,使用了现在分词短语“chatting with the family, watching TV or visiting relatives”作伴随状语,增强了句子表达的多样性;句⑤than后使用倒装,句子显得平衡;句③、句⑥运用了关系副词why和关系代词who以及关系代词which引出定语从句,丰富了表达效果;句⑦中使用比较级结构,起到承上启下作用;句⑧使用“not only…but also…”,不仅语意连贯清楚,同时句子显得更紧凑。
巩固运用
假设你是李华,你的英国朋友Peter来信向你询问如何才能学好中文。请你根据下列要点写封回信。
要点:
1. 参加中文学习班;2. 看中文书刊、电视;3. 学唱中文歌曲; 4. 交中国朋友。
注意:1. 词数100左右;2. 可适当增加细节,以使行文连贯;3. 开头语已为你写好。
Dear Peter,
I’m glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Best wishes!
信息整合
(1)“点”、“句”组织及拓展
参加中文学习班:take a Chinese course →
It is important to take a Chinese course, as you’ll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow classmates.
看中文书刊、电视:
watch TV and read books,newspapers and magazines in Chinese →
It helps to watch TV and read books,newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.
学唱中文歌曲:learn and sing Chinese songs →
It should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs,because you’ll learn and remember Chinese words more easily by doing so.
交中国朋友:make Chinese friends →
You can also make more Chinese friends,who will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.
(2)语篇组织
Dear Peter,
I’m glad to receive your letter asking for my advice on how to learn Chinese well.
Here are a few suggestions. First,it is important to take a Chinese course,as you’ll be able to learn from the teacher and practice with your fellow classmates. Then,it also helps to watch TV and read books, newspapers and magazines in Chinese whenever possible.
Besides,it should be a good idea to learn and sing Chinese songs, because you’ll learn and remember Chinese words more easily by doing so. You can also make more Chinese friends,who will tell you a lot about China and help you learn Chinese.
Try and write me in Chinese next time.
Best wishes!Li Hua
编辑/梁宇清