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陈传光 男，江苏省连云港市罗阳中学高级教师，从事教育工作逾15年。江苏省教育学会会员，连云港市优秀教育园丁，曾荣获英语专业技能大赛市一等奖，班主任基本功大赛市一等奖。有多篇论文在各主流和核心期刊上发表。指导学生在各类竞赛中取得了优异成绩，多人获得省级、地市级奖。
My school is very beautiful. There are lots of beautiful flowers and trees in my school but① it is always clean and tidy. There is a big playground in my school. We have P.E. classes on the playground and we often do sports there. Our teaching building has five floors. My classroom is on the fifth floor. It is big and tidy. The computer rooms are on the third floor. There is a big library on the second floor. There are many books in the library. I often read books there. There are some music rooms and art rooms in the teaching building， too. The teachers in our school are very kind. The students are very nice and smart. I love my school， because it’s my the② second home.
江蘇省连云港市罗阳中学七（5）班 吴甜甜
点评
1. 优点：
校园是我们每个人都再熟悉不过的了，我们在这里学习，也收获知识和友谊。在本文中，小作者首先向我们介绍了学校的整体环境，接着又介绍了操场及教学楼，最后点明学校是第二个家。本文用词得当、条理清晰，是一篇优秀的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①but改为and。上下文是并列关系。
②the去掉。序数词前有形容词性物主代词my修饰，删掉the。
3. 评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得22分。
My school is very beautiful. There are lots of beautiful flowers and trees in my school but① it is always clean and tidy. There is a big playground in my school. We have P.E. classes on the playground and we often do sports there. Our teaching building has five floors. My classroom is on the fifth floor. It is big and tidy. The computer rooms are on the third floor. There is a big library on the second floor. There are many books in the library. I often read books there. There are some music rooms and art rooms in the teaching building， too. The teachers in our school are very kind. The students are very nice and smart. I love my school， because it’s my the② second home.
江蘇省连云港市罗阳中学七（5）班 吴甜甜
点评
1. 优点：
校园是我们每个人都再熟悉不过的了，我们在这里学习，也收获知识和友谊。在本文中，小作者首先向我们介绍了学校的整体环境，接着又介绍了操场及教学楼，最后点明学校是第二个家。本文用词得当、条理清晰，是一篇优秀的习作。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①but改为and。上下文是并列关系。
②the去掉。序数词前有形容词性物主代词my修饰，删掉the。
3. 评分：
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准，本文修改前可得22分。