我对杨柳小调说,把你写父的那篇夺冠文发我看看。作者很快就发来,因我们熟络,说话就直捷,行文也随意和随便。杨柳的文我不太陌生,以前读她写树的散文就深有感触。后来她写进城打工的姐妹,点上的文字功夫尤其了得。该篇开头就渲染了环境:一个塬上的地垄,一个野菊花,远山下,枫叶红,这是个什么意境啊?绚烂之极,这预设着重要人物父亲的出场。我们说文章好不好,第一句很重要,如唱歌之 I said to Yang Liu in a minor tune, and take a look at the title you wrote for your father. The author sent soon, because we are familiar with, speak straight, the wording is casual and casual. Willow’s text I am not too familiar, before she wrote the essay written tree feel deeply. Later, she wrote into the city working sisters, point the text Kung Fu especially amazing. The beginning of the article on the rendering of the environment: a plateau ridge, a wild chrysanthemum, distant mountains, Maple Leaf red, which is what mood? Splendid pole, which presupposes the appearance of important figures father. We say that the article is good, the first sentence is very important, such as singing