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This year’s summer holiday was the most unforgettable. I spent fifteen days at my grandparents’ home in the countryside.
Every morning, I went to the field to help my grandparents do farm work after have① breakfast. I learned a lot of agricultural knowledge from them. In the afternoon, I usually spent most of my time on the hill. My new friends and I ran after each other, picked fresh fruits and catch② butterflies together. There was always so many③ fun.
Sometimes I went to swim in the river in the village. The water in it was quite clear. In the evening, I often helped the little kids in the neighborhood at④ their lessons. I was patient but strict with them, just liked a real teacher. Now, I really miss them very much. I hope I could go back there again next summer holiday.
江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学八(1)班 王冬冬
1. 优点:
本文是一篇记叙文。小作者回忆自己在祖父母家里过暑假的难忘经历。文章按照时间顺序,描述了她丰富多彩的乡下生活,并表达对农村生活的热爱。整篇文章文字流畅、用词得当,是一篇不错的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① have改为having。after是介词,介词后接动词的-ing形式;
② catch改为caught。结合上下文,此处应使用一般过去时;
③ many改为much。many只能修饰可数名词的复数,much只能修饰不可数名词,fun是不可数名词;
④ at改为with。help sb. with sth.是固定结构,意为“在某方面帮助某人”。
3. 评分:
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准,本文修改前可得23分。
Every morning, I went to the field to help my grandparents do farm work after have① breakfast. I learned a lot of agricultural knowledge from them. In the afternoon, I usually spent most of my time on the hill. My new friends and I ran after each other, picked fresh fruits and catch② butterflies together. There was always so many③ fun.
Sometimes I went to swim in the river in the village. The water in it was quite clear. In the evening, I often helped the little kids in the neighborhood at④ their lessons. I was patient but strict with them, just liked a real teacher. Now, I really miss them very much. I hope I could go back there again next summer holiday.
江苏省连云港市赣榆区罗阳中学八(1)班 王冬冬
1. 优点:
本文是一篇记叙文。小作者回忆自己在祖父母家里过暑假的难忘经历。文章按照时间顺序,描述了她丰富多彩的乡下生活,并表达对农村生活的热爱。整篇文章文字流畅、用词得当,是一篇不错的学生习作。
2. 需要修改的地方:
① have改为having。after是介词,介词后接动词的-ing形式;
② catch改为caught。结合上下文,此处应使用一般过去时;
③ many改为much。many只能修饰可数名词的复数,much只能修饰不可数名词,fun是不可数名词;
④ at改为with。help sb. with sth.是固定结构,意为“在某方面帮助某人”。
3. 评分:
按江苏省连云港市中考英语作文满分25分的评分标准,本文修改前可得23分。