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姜经志 男，中学英语高级教师，省级骨干教师，淮北市优秀教师，中国外语学习学研究会会员，《学英语》《英语周报》特约编辑。多年来，在省级以上报刊发表文章800余篇，并有多篇论文获奖。曾主编《初中生英语满分作文大全》《英语奥林匹克》《新目标英语八年级暑假作业》，参编《高中英语知识点反馈与阅读》《初中英语题典大全》《21世纪英语学习指南》《初中英语新作文》《中学生英语水平测试》等10余册，辅导学生30余人次在国家和省级英语竞赛中获奖。
Huang Ping is our monitor. She has a long black hair①. She is not only a beautiful girl but also a kind girl. One day the wind blew strongly at night. She woke up and remembered that the windows of her classroom were open. “I should go to close the windows，” she said to herself. Then she put on her clothes and run② to the classroom against the wind. She didn’t go back until she closed all the windows. She was cold and tired， but she felt quite happily③.
How④ a good girl！
安徽省濉溪縣百善中心学校七（3）班 陈强
1. 优点：
本篇习作的小作者对班长进行外貌和心理描写，让一个心地善良、关心集体的美好形象跃然纸上。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①a long black hair改为long black hair。hair表示“头发；毛发”时是不可数名词，所以前面不能加不定冠词a。
②run改为ran。语境分析，此处应用动词过去式。
③happily改为happy。feel意为“感到”，是系动词，后面应接形容词作表语。
④How改为What。感叹句的中心词是名词时，引导感叹句的感叹词应用What。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准，本文修改前可得22分。
Huang Ping is our monitor. She has a long black hair①. She is not only a beautiful girl but also a kind girl. One day the wind blew strongly at night. She woke up and remembered that the windows of her classroom were open. “I should go to close the windows，” she said to herself. Then she put on her clothes and run② to the classroom against the wind. She didn’t go back until she closed all the windows. She was cold and tired， but she felt quite happily③.
How④ a good girl！
安徽省濉溪縣百善中心学校七（3）班 陈强
1. 优点：
本篇习作的小作者对班长进行外貌和心理描写，让一个心地善良、关心集体的美好形象跃然纸上。
2. 需要修改的地方：
①a long black hair改为long black hair。hair表示“头发；毛发”时是不可数名词，所以前面不能加不定冠词a。
②run改为ran。语境分析，此处应用动词过去式。
③happily改为happy。feel意为“感到”，是系动词，后面应接形容词作表语。
④How改为What。感叹句的中心词是名词时，引导感叹句的感叹词应用What。
3. 评分：
按中考英语作文满分25分的标准，本文修改前可得22分。