【失误原文】那个温暖的表情南京市六合区马鞍中学谢震早晨,天阴沉沉的,好像要下雨的样子,我嫌累赘,就没有带上雨伞。傍晚,突然狂风大作。我正在教室打扫卫生,只听见窗外竟传来一阵阵粗暴紧密的雨打树叶声,和着雨滴敲击玻璃窗的声音。天公就像故意与我作对,霎时间,大雨沛然而至。(交代事情发生的时令、背景,为下文写父亲做了铺垫。但略显突兀。) [That] the warm expression of Sadhu High School, Liuhe District, Nanjing Chen Zhen morning, overcast, it seems like to rain, I was too cumbersome, there is no umbrella. In the evening, a sudden wind blows. I was cleaning in the classroom, I heard only heard the storm out of the window rolling rain and leaves, and raindrops hitting the windows of the voice. God just like I deliberately against, all of a sudden, heavy rain Pei to. (To illustrate the time and place where things happened, to pave the way for the following writers, but slightly unexpected.)