李奕畅同学的作品浑厚、端庄,笔画粗细对比明显,章法合理。建议:1.字的大小要统一。整幅作品基本做到了风格、大小一致,但“知”字明显偏小。2.笔画要自然有力。“方、不”的撇画写得不够自然;“用、知”的撇画写得软弱无力。3.字的结体要美观。“书”中横画长短不一且间距不均等,导致整个字被拉长了;“恨”的捺画起笔位置不对,显得拘谨别扭;“到”的左上部偏小。 Li Yichang students works vigorous, dignified, the contrast of the thickness of the strokes clearly, Chapter law is reasonable. Suggestions: 1. Word size to unity. The entire work has basically done the style, the same size, but “know ” was significantly smaller. 2. Strokes should be natural and powerful. “Square, not ” the sketched writing is not enough natural; “use, know ” sketched writing weak. 3 words of the body to be beautiful. “” In the horizontal and vertical spacing of different sizes, resulting in the whole word is elongated; “hate ” of the drawing of the pen position is wrong, appear cautious; “to ” left upper part of the small .